Summer Embroidery

Summer embroidered
sunflowers in the grass,
heat stitched in yellow and green.

Their bowed heads brought
thoughts of prayer-----

I wonder if God remembers
the sound of my voice?


©Susie Clevenger 2014


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Comments

Kerry O'Connor said…
What a wonderfully self-contained poem. You ask a big question here, which seem to arise naturally from a contemplation of nature.
April 1, 2014 at 4:29 AM
avalon said…
The needlework metaphors are so cheery, leading into ecclesiastical painting and hence into prayer.
So much in so few words.
April 1, 2014 at 4:46 AM
Fireblossom said…
They say that no child forgets its mother's voice. I expect the reverse is true, too.
April 1, 2014 at 5:25 AM
Lolamouse said…
Lovely and contemplative. You say much in very few words.
April 1, 2014 at 7:06 AM
Anonymous said…
Wow! I'm not religious, but the imagery these words captured... Beautiful! Made my racing mind stop for a second!
April 1, 2014 at 7:31 AM
Maude Lynn said…
Susie this is really moody and gorgeous. I love it.
April 1, 2014 at 9:45 AM
Sumana Roy said…
beautiful thoughts expressed in the perfect imagery..
April 1, 2014 at 10:53 AM
Kathryn Dyche said…
few words but it speak volumes . . . love it.
April 1, 2014 at 11:54 AM
Sherry Blue Sky said…
I love the progression of this poem....gently steps leading to a big question.
April 1, 2014 at 12:07 PM
Ella said…
I love what Mama Zen said-yes, it drips with mood and the wonder of the universe's tidal pool. He remembers-your fingerprints are outlined with petals. Magic blooms when you write~
April 1, 2014 at 4:32 PM
Other Mary said…
Beautiful images, and your final couplet is very thought-provoking!
April 1, 2014 at 7:17 PM
Jim said…
Nice progression, Susie. Next stop is to test the waters with a prayer.

I like those sunflowers and grass, yellow and green. We drove to Washington on the Brazos today (top down, picnic of cold pizza and 7Up) and saw many fields of yellow and green. Blue and orange too. These were standing tall, too proud to pray.
April 1, 2014 at 8:14 PM
Margaret said…
Such a huge pondering question for so dainty a poem. But I truly believe the answer is a simple "yes" Embroidered is such a lovely visual!
April 1, 2014 at 9:34 PM
hedgewitch said…
I think if you have to ask...I love the way this gently makes its point, Susie, of gratitude, of appreciation, and of the wry onlooker as well.
April 2, 2014 at 7:32 AM
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