Serpens


Even a snake has charms
if the flirt before the strike
has enough rose petals.

No one looks for a predator
in honey or hears the hiss
when heat is generated
from a love song.

Be careful of what crawls
in poison grass without
getting burned - Pretty words
may come bearing scars.

©Susie Clevenger 2016

Real Toads Sunday Mini-Challenge ~ Carpe Jugulum

Comments

brudberg said…
Wonderful metaphor for the threats in the lures we might meet.
February 14, 2016 at 1:16 AM
Rommy said…
I feel I print this out for each one of my children. Oh gods yes, a bit of wariness can be a very good thing.
February 14, 2016 at 9:49 AM
Magaly Guerrero said…
I'm with Björn, your use of metaphor does a fantastic job illustrating the dangers of the trap, showing how obvious the warnings but so easy to see when the focus is elsewhere.
February 14, 2016 at 9:52 AM
Ella said…
Oh, I could almost hear a hissing tongue~ Brilliant, Susie!
Happy Valentine's Day~
I have missed your poetry
February 14, 2016 at 9:54 AM
Kerry said…
Pretty words
may come bearing scars.


There's the truth of it! What a great cautionary tale.
February 14, 2016 at 9:56 AM
Maude Lynn said…
That first stanza is just awesome!
February 14, 2016 at 10:52 AM
Debi Swim said…
Pretty words

may come bearing scars... I know that for a fact
February 14, 2016 at 3:33 PM
Gillena Cox said…
caution, always, the caution factor come in as warning, never at "the head over heel stage"

much love...
February 14, 2016 at 3:44 PM
Outlawyer said…
Ha! Even unpretty words! k.
February 14, 2016 at 4:36 PM
Anonymous said…
this is full of truth
February 14, 2016 at 5:48 PM
Hannah said…
Concise and awesome use of metaphor, Susie!
February 14, 2016 at 6:44 PM
Jim said…
A wonderful "Ides of February" (ironically the day before Valentine's Day, the 13th), poem, Susie. Especially the last lines,
"in poison grass without
getting burned - Pretty words
may come bearing scars."
'
'Et to Brute?'
..
February 14, 2016 at 8:05 PM
Carol Campbell said…
Perfect metaphors! Sage advice!
February 15, 2016 at 12:45 PM
Sara McNulty said…
Wise words, Susie. Great poem!
February 15, 2016 at 7:28 PM
Margaret said…
I've never come across a charming snake. Well, now, the story Verdi was one of my children's favorite stories when young - about a snake. :) Great metaphor.
February 15, 2016 at 9:39 PM
Anusha Das said…
Pretty words
may come bearing scars."
'wise poem
February 16, 2016 at 3:08 AM
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