Prying Moon ~ Triquain



Prying moon,
your neon bled across
the lawn until it discovered me
burying forgiveness among summer roses.
I wasn’t ready for repentance,
but you knew I couldn’t
deny you.

©Susie Clevenger 2014

At Real Toads Kerry challenged us to write using the triquain form,
seven lines with syllables counted in multiples of three.
3-6-9-12-9-6-3

Sunday Mini-Challenge ~ Triquain

Comments

Fireblossom said…
Ms. Moon tends to be wise like that.
August 18, 2014 at 5:15 AM
Grace said…
I love it Susie ~ Opening imagery is just stellar ~
August 18, 2014 at 5:16 AM
Marian said…
whoosh! no denying the moon, even when hell-bent on trying. :)
August 18, 2014 at 6:05 AM
brudberg said…
Amazing imagery... the prying moon, and burying forgiveness. like a murder at night.. still the moon always knows that we go on...
August 18, 2014 at 8:44 AM
Sumana Roy said…
Prying moon- so cleverly put and love the imagery in "burying forgiveness among summer roses"..
August 18, 2014 at 10:47 AM
Sherry Blue Sky said…
So beautiful. "burying forgiveness among summer roses".
August 18, 2014 at 11:52 AM
Helen said…
You were able to make the form feel effortless ~ which it is not!
August 18, 2014 at 12:33 PM
Other Mary said…
That's quite a profound little bit of loveliness Susie.
August 18, 2014 at 1:56 PM
kaykuala said…
Prying moon will discover lots of secrets! One just can't help but give in! Nicely Susie!

Hank
August 19, 2014 at 4:38 AM
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