Broken City Of Stones

A dust moon shines
its muddy glow on
the cardboard skyline
painting it shades of sepia.

From my vantage point
upon the roof I could
see everything and nothing
in the dismal tomb of lost dreams.

No matter how high
I climb toward the stars
gravity always pulls me back
to this broken city of stones.


©Susie Clevenger 2014

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Comments

Fireblossom said…
Ah but you'll always get up and start climbing again, won't you?
February 19, 2014 at 6:13 PM
Susan said…
Tomb of lost dreams!
Gravity!

A bleak vision, but the stones and cardboard give me hope of a literal breakthrough.
February 20, 2014 at 3:34 AM
Unknown said…
Gravity's as bitch but it keeps us grounded.
February 20, 2014 at 4:42 AM
Vandana Sharma said…
very nicely done , the stars, gravity all so wonderful!!!
February 20, 2014 at 5:07 AM
Kenia Santos said…
The thing is you insist. Persistency is something I really admire in people.

Thank you muchly for writing to my prompt and stopping by and leaving me such a thoughtful comment and sharing me. <3

Kiss you!
February 20, 2014 at 6:59 AM
Ella said…
Wow, I love your beginning-I want to create it and your ending...Yes, you always carry on~
February 20, 2014 at 8:17 AM
hedgewitch said…
Susie, this really has movement and feeling to it, inexorable and deep. I love the dust moon and the cardboard sky, and the word 'sepia' just makes this whole poem gel. Really good stuff.
February 20, 2014 at 9:35 AM
humbird said…
Still we can hope and climb again, dreams, you know, we can arrange them at our taste...:)xx
February 20, 2014 at 1:59 PM
gabrielle said…
falldowngetup--it's one continuous motion. I so admire your honesty and your perseverance.
February 20, 2014 at 3:26 PM
Kay L. Davies said…
It's the getting up that counts.
And I love the cardboard skyline line.
Hugs, K
February 20, 2014 at 8:03 PM
Kerry O'Connor said…
Oooh! This is really good poetry, Susie. Each stanza holds its own and the final line has so much flair.
February 21, 2014 at 7:29 AM
Anonymous said…
a sense of emptiness you've woven in just a few strokes, Susie ~
February 21, 2014 at 1:07 PM
Anonymous said…
You have some amazing imagery in here. I love the cardboard skyline.
February 21, 2014 at 7:12 PM
Grace said…
I specially love that last stanza, broken city of stones ~ Lovely writing Susie ~
February 23, 2014 at 3:48 PM
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