Autumn ~ Tanka

I felt autumn’s breath
brush my cheek,
a soft kiss of leaves
pirouetting from limbs
soon to be barren.

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Gold rained from dark limbs
in a wind song of autumn’s ending.
Their rustling sonata performed
beneath a blue sky waiting
for winter to ice the clouds.

©Susie Clevenger 2013

Real Toads ~ Tanka Part 2

Comments

Marian said…
pretty, Susie. living in just this moment up here, too :)
October 20, 2013 at 10:32 AM
Kerry O'Connor said…
Two lovely tanka, Susan. I especially like the image of the golden rain of leaves as winter embraces the land.
October 20, 2013 at 10:51 AM
Billy Blue Eyes said…
Beautiful, what more can I say.
October 20, 2013 at 11:01 AM
brudberg said…
I loved that kiss in the first tanka. lovely.
October 20, 2013 at 1:27 PM
Sherry Blue Sky said…
Uplifting and glorious......especially the "wind song of autumn's ending".
October 20, 2013 at 1:42 PM
Ella said…
Pretty imagery guiding your message!
I love yours~
October 20, 2013 at 2:00 PM
Helen said…
You brought Autumn to life, glorious technicolor life!!! Great tanka...
October 20, 2013 at 2:16 PM
Scarlet said…
I can see those leaves pirouetting and hear their rustling sonata ~ Lovely tanka Susie ~
October 20, 2013 at 3:24 PM
Susie Swanson said…
Love both of them. Awesome.
October 20, 2013 at 5:26 PM
Maude Lynn said…
These are so pretty, Susie!
October 20, 2013 at 7:27 PM
Kay L. Davies said…
The ballet and the sonata, Susie, both so lovely, but the pirouetting leaf captured my imagination. I love autumn.
K
October 20, 2013 at 8:37 PM
Vandana Sharma said…
The essence of autumn:)
October 20, 2013 at 11:32 PM
Anonymous said…
well conceived imagery in both; my favorite is the first (if only by a whisker)
October 21, 2013 at 2:20 PM
Hannah said…
Each of these hold a distinct turning point of emotion in them...somber tones...nicely done, Susie!!
October 22, 2013 at 9:05 PM
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