Drowning Sound Waves

There are
so many
love songs
drowning
sound waves
with tears.

She hums the melodies
with a damaged heart
and seeks a one night stand
to be her bandage.

Temporary, pseudo affection
will placate her until morning
re-wraps her in grief.


©Susie Clevenger 2013


Kerry at Real Toads challenged us to write in the  poetry style of Imagists.
Real Toads ~ A Birthday in September ~ William Carlos Williams

Comments

aka_andrea said…
Oh Susie~ I love this!
"drowning sound waves with tears."
I love the circle you create with the water references in this.

I love the ending as well, morning re-wrapping her in grief.

A beautiful write!
August 31, 2013 at 5:42 PM
Ella said…
YOU made a touching, sore subject beautiful~ Wow Susie! :D I am in awe
August 31, 2013 at 5:51 PM
Helen said…
Layering on the pain, one night stands will do that. Lovely write!
August 31, 2013 at 8:04 PM
Kay L. Davies said…
And it is never a helpful bandage.
So right, and a good write, Susie!
K
August 31, 2013 at 11:58 PM
Kerry O'Connor said…
Your opening stanza is very reminiscent of Williams' style and a poem that tries to get to grips with the subject of love and pain very in keeping with his themes. Yet this poem is very much your own.
September 1, 2013 at 3:38 AM
Susan said…
Sad. True. Beautifully knowing.
September 1, 2013 at 8:39 AM
Debi Swim said…
short, to the point and true. The pain shows through!
September 1, 2013 at 1:06 PM
humbird said…
sounds so lyrical,with melancholia...nice poem
September 1, 2013 at 7:45 PM
ed pilolla said…
such well chosen words created from a place of empathy and perspective.
September 2, 2013 at 4:49 PM
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