Question the Leap


Leap of love,
why does it
sound like death?

I don’t want
to give up
being me
to be funneled
into your conception.

Walk beside me.
My feet refuse
the command
to follow.
  

©Susie Clevenger 2013

Trifextra ~ Week 70

The challenge was to write to the photo prompt using exactly 33 words.



Comments

steph said…
Walk beside me... very nice. I like the confidence in the voice. Well done.
June 1, 2013 at 6:34 PM
Maggie Grace said…
Ahhh, lovely. I remember the days of being consumed before learning how to be equal...an individual. Really beautiful writing.
June 1, 2013 at 8:01 PM
Ann Bennett said…
My grandmother always said, "You can talk me into anything but you can't tell me to do anything." Human nature.
June 1, 2013 at 8:47 PM
Susie Clevenger said…
@Maggie Grace, thanks so much
June 1, 2013 at 10:15 PM
Susie Clevenger said…
@Ann, That's for sure. :)
June 1, 2013 at 10:15 PM
Vandana Sharma said…
Love means freedom, the person should accept the way we are :) lovely poem...as always...:)
June 2, 2013 at 3:17 AM
Draug said…
This is really great. I love how you put it.
June 2, 2013 at 10:56 AM
Susie Clevenger said…
@VanDnAnA, thank you so much
June 2, 2013 at 11:02 AM
Trifecta said…
Love is all about cooperation and meeting in the middle. This portrays that wisdom wonderfully.

Thank you for linking up!
June 2, 2013 at 11:14 AM
Susie Clevenger said…
@Draug, Thank you!
@Trifeta, Thanks! I loved the challenge!
June 2, 2013 at 11:40 AM
Sage Ravenwood said…
Perfect description of love and yes, it should be questioned. Everyone believes that love makes two people into one whole. I'd rather believe it's two individuals who share a life, not one entity. (Hugs)Indigo
June 2, 2013 at 2:51 PM
Susie Clevenger said…
@Indigo, thank you so much! I so agree.
June 2, 2013 at 3:09 PM
De Jackson said…
Love
"funneled
into your conception,"
especially.
June 2, 2013 at 3:14 PM
Suzanne said…
This is lovely Susie! I love the last stanza in particular. Well done!
June 2, 2013 at 3:24 PM
Christine Hanolsy said…
I love that last stanza. "My feet refuse the command to follow." Fantastic!
June 2, 2013 at 3:34 PM
Anonymous said…
I love that last stanza. "My feet refuse the command to follow." Fantastic!
June 2, 2013 at 3:34 PM
brudberg said…
very beautiful and well told
June 2, 2013 at 3:47 PM
JannaTWrites said…
This is wonderful! I agree that we shouldn't lose ourselves in love or be forced to follow.
June 2, 2013 at 11:30 PM
Susie Clevenger said…
@De, thank you
@Suzanne, thank you so much!
@Christine, Thanks
@trudingthroughfog, Thank you!
@Bjorn, thanks so much
@Janna, thank you...we should always remain who we are
June 3, 2013 at 1:29 AM
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