NaPoWriMo 2013 Day 25 ~ An Apple's Coffined Sleep



Jealousy didn’t like what a mirror spoke
and turned a poisoned apple in to coffined sleep.
Snow White’s tale of an evil queen,
seven dwarfs and a prince
proved love had the power
to reverse the sting of animus’s venom.


©Susie Clevenger 2013

Izy at Real Toads has us writing Cliff Notes of our favorite stories. She also set a limit of ten lines. Out of Standard ~ Cliff Notes

Comments

Rita Odeh said…
Snow White is my favourite fairy tale since childhood.
The challenge was really inspiring. You expressed your thoughts in a stunning way.

Blessings...
Rita
April 25, 2013 at 2:57 AM
Susan said…
Haha! "animus venom"! Love is always the answer. I like this one a lot.
April 25, 2013 at 4:24 AM
Janine Bollée said…
With the competently succinct [how I love this word] way you construed the first 2 lines, we could go straight from 'sleep' to 'love' and understand this.
Maybe the bright shiny image gives the game away:-)
April 25, 2013 at 5:39 AM
Fireblossom said…
Beware of fruit vendors wearing pointy black hats!
April 25, 2013 at 7:44 AM
Kerry O'Connor said…
Snow White is such a perennial favourite. I like the way you shifted the focus to the apple, the jealousy and brought the characters in later.
April 25, 2013 at 8:53 AM
Maude Lynn said…
Love "coffined sleep." That is so cool!
April 25, 2013 at 9:33 AM
Margaret said…
....jealousy had it coming!
April 25, 2013 at 11:26 AM
Anonymous said…
This is wonderful!
April 25, 2013 at 1:18 PM
LLM Calling said…
I love the way you've penned, it almost obliterates the fear this film fills me with
April 25, 2013 at 2:56 PM
Ella said…

Bravo....
I guess I need to redo mine!
;D
Love how you expressed the doom and gloom and enchantment!
April 25, 2013 at 4:11 PM
Isadora Gruye said…
I agree with Aprille, that your first two lines are brilliantly synched and set up the focus of this Cliffs Notes on the power of love. Well done!!! and Viva la
April 25, 2013 at 8:25 PM
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