"I am hearing poetry when awake, dreaming poetry when asleep, breathing poetry with each breath, I am living in a poem."

Wednesday, December 26, 2012

Ride the Beat

Mind the Gap and Dubstep

Ride the beat
with thumping
inside your

Let it take
your heart
from its
tap dance
on wooden
to a mixed
of electric

Life is
too fleeting
in its
to stay
inside lines
by judgment's

If there is
no partner
who wishes
to dance
to a beat
of a
foreign drum,
break into
solo steps
that take
your feet

©Susie Clevenger 2012


Margaret said...

The third stanza is outstanding! (Don't live in) ... & solo steps can be quite excellent. NIce take on this challenge... one I couldn't wrap any creativity around at all (I did try though)

aprille said...

What a clever write. Love the thoughts of moving with the times as well as in time.
And isn't that a splendid example of the sound and dance. So nicely understated.

Mimi Foxmorton said...

*lines drawn by judgement's hand*

Ooo....I LOVE that! A perfect fit!

But my favorite-favorite is *foreign drum*......oh, how I am so happy to embrace that beat.........

Have a creative New Year!
I look forward to reading your work in 2013!

All Hail the Dubstep Goat!
(who knew?)


The Goat Borrower

Susan said...

Letting go of "judgement's hand" to go solo! Wow.

thewritersvillage said...

“Ride the beat with thumping thoughts reverberating inside your seclusion”
I hear poems when there’s no one there

”Let it take your heart… to.. eclectic expression”
Hearts bursting in air, gave proof through the night

“Life is too fleeting in its parenthesis to stay glued inside lines…”
Footloose… kick off your Sunday shoes

“..break into solo steps…”

It isn’t raining rain, you know, it’s raining solo steps

So when you see goats upon the hill….
Your poem inspired me.


Kerry O'Connor said...

Yes, this is a strong call for individuality. I particularly love the thoughts you expressed in the third stanza. Really cool.

Marian said...

gosh, susie, that third stanza! kudos!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

LOVE THIS!!!!! Especially the last stanza! "beyond expectation" - yes!

Emma Major said...

such a great message,keep on dancing

Hannah said...

Love this portion:

"Life is
too fleeting
in its
to stay
inside lines
by judgment's

Great writing!!

Isadora Gruye said...

I love the tone here, brief, beating, and strong in its character. I too liked the third stanza, in particular calling into the question the shortness of the parenthetical order. Well done and thanks for participating in the Out of Standard prompt!!!!

Susie Swanson said...

You outdone yourself on this one. Great write.

Lolamouse said...

Love it! Don't wait for a partner-just dance!

Stacey said...

Tap dancing hearts vs the things your body can do when confronted with wobbly bass lines. Some great turns of phrase here.

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