Jue Ju Times Two



© Teresa Perin


the oak leaf took flight
twirling in the autumn air
to rest upon brown grass
the death of a season


©Susie Clevenger 2012


Image ~ stockvault


Honest Heat

Were I a virgin shell
I would gladly give you
the pearl secreted within me,
but I am a woman.

Passion will not frighten me.
I need no gentle wooing
or words you don’t mean,
just honest heat igniting mine.

I don’t care about promises
or whether we meet again.
Tonight I want to burn
from flames we can’t contain.



©Susie Clevenger 2012

 
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Comments

Kerry O'Connor said…
There is quite a contrast between these two pieces, Susie, which shows your versatility as a writer. You have set a wistful tone in your Autumn piece, and then wowed us with your passionate feminine voice in the longer poem. I love that she is unapologetic and knows what she wants.
October 21, 2012 at 2:00 AM
Scarlet said…
Lovely two pieces ~

I like the clear image of autumn in the first one, and the whew heat and passion in the second verse ~
October 21, 2012 at 7:00 AM
Mary said…
I enjoyed both poems, Susie. The first expresses the sadness of the end of autumn.

And the second is rich with, shall we say, the heat of the moment!
October 21, 2012 at 8:45 AM
Janine Bollée said…
So impressed you managed to stay to the five words per line.
Also the stanza being a proper syntax sentence. Well written and good to read.
October 21, 2012 at 9:01 AM
Marian said…
what a concept, "honest heat." that is exactly right. very, very nice pieces.
October 21, 2012 at 9:08 AM
hedgewitch said…
Great contrast between these two, and it makes both of them stronger pairing them, I think. There is a lot of truth-telling in the second that really resonates for me, and you use the form well throughout--the word count being limited seems to make the images more vivid. Great work, Susie.
October 21, 2012 at 12:44 PM
Sherry Blue Sky said…
Strong pieces, Susie, from a strong woman. Awesome offerings this Sunday morning - a rich feast! I love the leaf photo, by the way.
October 21, 2012 at 1:47 PM
Hannah Pratt said…
Very nice. Awake for a dream.
October 21, 2012 at 7:03 PM
Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said…
Such a contrast between the two--your second piece is on fire--just fabulous!
October 21, 2012 at 7:57 PM
Kay L. Davies said…
Well done, Susie, well said. I love the sad beauty of the first poem and the outright honesty of the second.
K
October 21, 2012 at 9:14 PM
Teresa said…
Such different poems, but I love them both!
October 21, 2012 at 9:15 PM
Unknown said…
The oak leaf is such a great symbol. The last line says it all.
October 21, 2012 at 10:52 PM
Hannah said…
A bit of a somber tone...image captured will in your brevity and your second...yes, love the heat in this one...you created a strong feminine character in this one...great work on these!!!
October 22, 2012 at 6:58 AM
Helen said…
I also loved the contrast in your poems ... the second is spellbinding!
October 22, 2012 at 9:29 AM
Tania A said…
Absolutely intoxicating, especially the second piece.
October 22, 2012 at 10:30 AM
Margaret said…
Wow! Each poem's words are as strong as the photo images.
October 22, 2012 at 7:51 PM
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