Space


the space between us
was a valley of distrust
my heart could not cross

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he asked for his space
his bags now sit on the porch
i changed the door locks

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a stack of papers
please initial the last line
his space now granted


©Susie Clevenger 2011
 Photographs: Photobucket
Haiku Height Prompt: #97- Space
Haiku Heights

Comments

Ruchi Jain said…
Deep presentation of a tale in haiku....
December 8, 2011 at 4:31 AM
Janet Martin said…
How can something so sad be so...beautiful?
December 8, 2011 at 7:12 AM
Maude Lynn said…
Fabulous take on the prompt! I wouldn't have thought of that.
December 8, 2011 at 8:37 AM
Ben Ditty said…
Aw, divorce is such a sad thing :(
December 8, 2011 at 12:28 PM
Priyanka Bhowmick said…
very sad yet 3 of them together made a good story.
December 9, 2011 at 9:08 AM
Anonymous said…
Although, the pain of Divorce is something I can relate to ... I really like your presentation and it gave me a wry chuckle! :-)
December 9, 2011 at 11:51 AM
Cassiopeia Rises said…
Very moving Haiku. Sad but beautiful.


Melanie
December 9, 2011 at 12:31 PM
Grace said…
Nice space haiku set...Very creative story telling ~
December 9, 2011 at 8:03 PM
Tigerbrite said…
Nice post. Well done.
December 10, 2011 at 12:02 PM
Anonymous said…
Excellent!
Happy Holidays….
I know you write stunning Haiku, welcome sharing with us,
1 to 3 or more are welcome.
no theme.
Hope to see you in,
Smiles!
December 23, 2011 at 12:38 AM
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