Paper Thin Immediate


The moon drinks memories
from your hands caressing my skin
as I curl into the jasmine scent
of so many yesterdays lost
to a calendar.

In the paper thin immediate
I stop reading the mirror and
trust I am the woman I see in your eyes.

Tomorrow surrenders its weapons.

Comments

✿ said…
Damn, Susie. This has everything I want --- erotica, the chosen hopefulness, brevity. I will drink of that yummy cup.
April 3, 2019 at 8:38 AM
✿ said…
Oh, and fabulous title.
April 3, 2019 at 8:38 AM
Ellecee said…
Lovely and sensual, Susie,, :-)
April 3, 2019 at 9:10 AM
M said…
so much to admire here, Susie, but especially the closing line ~
April 3, 2019 at 9:10 AM
Ron. said…
Oh, Clevenger, you're killin me. This is... Whammo! From beginning to end. Whammo! Period.
April 3, 2019 at 9:20 AM
Kerry O'Connor said…
That last line is the killer!
April 3, 2019 at 10:01 AM
Rosemary Nissen-Wade said…
Beautiful altogether, and what a great last line.
April 3, 2019 at 10:19 AM
Sanaa Rizvi said…
Wow!! You had me at the opening line ❤️❤️ This is sheer poetic brilliance!
April 3, 2019 at 10:20 AM
Anmol (HA) said…
This is so blissful — the experience, the atmosphere, and the flow of it.
"I curl into the jasmine scent" is my favourite phrase here.
April 3, 2019 at 11:21 AM
Angela Kay said…
This is so powerful, Susie!! Also relatable. Just lovely!
April 3, 2019 at 12:45 PM
tonispencer said…
What a wonderful last line. I have a feeling you are that woman.
April 3, 2019 at 6:23 PM
WildChild47 said…
word perfect --- paper thin immediate indeed! and as the others have said, absolute killer closing line!
love this from start to finish Susie - Brava!
April 3, 2019 at 7:34 PM
Margaret said…
... trust I am the woman... This whole poem is a silent prayer, a plea, a settling into... Gorgeous.
April 3, 2019 at 9:59 PM
Jim said…
Beautiful, Susie. Happy ending with encouraging Tomorrow.
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April 3, 2019 at 10:42 PM
Thotpurge said…
That close is so good!
April 3, 2019 at 11:12 PM
Kim M. Russell said…
Title, last line and all points in-between – wonderful, Susie!
April 4, 2019 at 3:50 AM
purplepeninportland.com said…
Wow! That first stanza knocked me out with its imagery and sensuality.
April 4, 2019 at 4:43 PM
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