Telarum

I damn the prison song of fate,
a hateful melody spinning
me into a clock whose face
sees a tomorrow I can’t edit.

It is…It isn’t…
It will…It won’t…
It can…It can’t…

I dance in toe shoes
that can’t feel my heartbeat
or know the danger of tears.

Destiny is the handmaiden of hell.

©Susie Clevenger 2015



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Comments

Isadora Gruye said…
Yes! I love how yo've mimicked the Ofortuna here but zip it up nicely with that ending line which is all your own. Nice work!
October 3, 2015 at 1:00 PM
Kerry O'Connor said…
Wonderful, Susie. We are all caught up in the web of fate and time.
October 3, 2015 at 3:09 PM
brudberg said…
The handmaiden of hell, yes that darn dark lady.. I feel like I'm dancing with a lead-footed lady to your song.. brilliant end.
October 3, 2015 at 3:28 PM
Susie Swanson said…
Awesome poem Susie. I'm always amazed by your creativity. As the old saying goes, "you can pull words out of a hat" Great job!!
October 3, 2015 at 4:13 PM
Maude Lynn said…
What a killer closing line!
October 3, 2015 at 4:29 PM
Hannah said…
Kick-butt closing line!!
October 3, 2015 at 5:07 PM
Rommy said…
Forced to dance the steps Destiny plays out...haunting
October 3, 2015 at 7:50 PM
Rosemary Nissen-Wade said…
You certainly captured the dark mood of that song – elegantly and eloquently..
October 3, 2015 at 10:35 PM
Susan said…
O Fortuna! for our times.
October 4, 2015 at 12:43 AM
Outlawyer said…
There is a sense of puppetry and clockwork when one speaks of fate-- you've caught that so well. K.
October 4, 2015 at 7:01 AM
hedgewitch said…
This really shows a responsiveness to the music, very spontaneous and full of a direct honesty. I don't think editing could possibly improve it. You seem to create a clock with your words, ticking mercilessly--one that no slam against the ground, no blow, can stop.
October 4, 2015 at 8:15 AM
Fireblossom said…
This is the fate of dancers, to move to music they didn't compose.
October 4, 2015 at 10:23 AM
ZQ said…
Geesh... well done.
ZQ
October 4, 2015 at 6:40 PM
grapeling said…
what a killer closing line, Susie ~
October 4, 2015 at 7:10 PM
Jim said…
You write of a cruel Destiny. She has a very kind sister. Might that sister be coming?
Her child rides the media waves and spell binds the concert goers. Has to be a good and kind mother.
October 5, 2015 at 11:53 AM
Margaret said…
Destiny - I say let's trip her up as best we can :)
October 7, 2015 at 10:20 PM
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