Beneath The Bubble Cap

Stars salt the moon
as midnight drinks
ink stains from a dipper.

Beneath the bubble cap
I toss questions into Sandman’s wink
hoping answers will glitter shadows.

Loss steals hours from sleep.
I pay remorse with tears,
but I fear it won’t be enough.
“If only” is too big a debt.


©Susie Clevenger 2015

NaPoWriMo ~ Day 6

Real Toads ~ Seeing Stars

Comments

Gillena Cox said…
Hi Susie, Monday WRites is up you are welcome to link in

http://myblog-verses.blogspot.com/2015/04/44.html

much love...
April 6, 2015 at 9:12 AM
Gillena Cox said…
the first verse i particularly luv, nice images throughout

much love...
April 6, 2015 at 9:14 AM
Outlawyer said…
Such a cool poem, Susie--so easy to relate too, though you write about these feelings in a far more eloquent way than most of us have in thinking of them--"if only" a huge debt-- just lovely. Thanks. k. (Manicddaily)
April 6, 2015 at 9:46 AM
Kerry O'Connor said…
Stars salt the moon..

I love that image. As an insomniac, I know the long night hours well.
April 6, 2015 at 10:02 AM
Maude Lynn said…
Wow, this is gorgeous!
April 6, 2015 at 10:03 AM
Buddah Moskowitz said…
"If only" is a huge price to pay - let it go and drift off to sleep, loved reading this.
April 6, 2015 at 10:30 AM
Hannah said…
So much depth of emotion in this, Susie...well done.
April 6, 2015 at 11:22 AM
hedgewitch said…
GREAT first stanza, Susie--really a fresh image, salting the moon, and the rest of the poem is secret and shiny as a familiar constellation barely seen in a cloudy deep sky--also love the title phrase--it could be so many things.
April 6, 2015 at 12:32 PM
Sherry Blue Sky said…
I love "stars salt the moon" and the idea of night drinking ink from a dipper. How cool. Your closing line resonates. Beautifully done, Susie.
April 6, 2015 at 12:52 PM
De Jackson said…
Oh, man. That first stanza is a stunning. So good.
April 6, 2015 at 1:08 PM
Debi Swim said…
I see the universe now as one big margarita... jk

I love that first verse and "if only"
April 6, 2015 at 1:24 PM
Rosemary Nissen-Wade said…
Every phrase so telling, so perfect. 'Loss steals hours from sleep' is the one that especially hits home for me.
April 6, 2015 at 4:53 PM
Sanaa Rizvi said…
This is beautiful... absolutely inspiring...
xoxo
April 6, 2015 at 6:33 PM
cosmos cami said…
I like the weight that last line gives the poem and I loved imagining the sky as spilled ink.
April 6, 2015 at 7:40 PM
Other Mary said…
Ah, yes..."If only" is a big one. Love your fresh, unexpected images in this piece.
April 7, 2015 at 12:17 AM
Marian said…
If only IS too big a debt.
April 7, 2015 at 5:54 AM
grapeling said…
"if only" is so fraught... ~
April 7, 2015 at 5:37 PM
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