Melancholy Brevity

                    "The Lovers' Boat" Albert Pinkham Ryder 1881


Beneath a heart sick moon
love swims in a briny sea
dreaming of rescue.

~o~

Patches of moon and star stiches
quilt midnight into melancholy.
Tear stained dreams wait for sunrise.

~o~

I listen to the rain
outside my window
drowning stars and
wonder if wishes can swim.

©Susie Clevenger 2015

Play it Again Toads ~ #13 

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Comments

brudberg said…
so much can be said in few words.. I used to start with twitter poetry, but not too active any longer.
January 26, 2015 at 3:17 AM
Maude Lynn said…
Oh, this is beautiful!
January 26, 2015 at 9:41 AM
Grace said…
Love the imagery of each one specially the last one ~
January 26, 2015 at 11:32 AM
Anonymous said…
Beautiful all but the last one...sigh
January 26, 2015 at 11:50 AM
Unknown said…
I really enjoyed the theme of drowning mood in this. It really helped define the emotion.
January 26, 2015 at 12:12 PM
kaykuala said…
How one yearns for wishes to be true. Perhaps praying hard may make it. It has a way of getting it to become true! Great lines Susie!

Hank
January 26, 2015 at 6:25 PM
Jim said…
"drowning stars and wonder if wishes can swim" reminds me of a book I read last week for our ship's book club project, Everything I Never Told You by Celeste NG>
It was about a teenager who drowned herself. We were in disagreement about whether it was a suicide or an accident. She had never learned to swim. I thought accident.

Our cruise was on the Emerald Princess out of the Port of Houston. It was sooo nice to not be flying for a change.
..
January 27, 2015 at 12:41 AM
Anonymous said…
These are just beautiful, Susie. You really have a gift for these--lovely and succinct. Thanks. k.
January 27, 2015 at 1:02 AM
Anonymous said…
Indeed. Such gorgeous melancholy.
January 27, 2015 at 4:08 AM
Gail said…
How can so much sadness fit into so few words? In this case sadness is very beautiful.
January 27, 2015 at 10:26 AM
Laura said…
you've described sadness so well… your poem blooms like a fragile blossom.
January 27, 2015 at 12:57 PM
Margaret said…
Adore the first one… makes me think of the moon's reflection in the water … representing a heartsick love.
January 27, 2015 at 3:38 PM
Hannah said…
I love the likening to that of a quilt and your closing line about swimming wishes...lovely as always, Susie!
January 27, 2015 at 7:55 PM
Other Mary said…
Beautiful! I love the quilting imagery in the second.
January 28, 2015 at 4:00 PM
Unknown said…
Wonder if wishes can swim... I think so!
January 28, 2015 at 6:56 PM
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