Yellow Wasn't The Trip

Not all things yellow are gold.

I ditched Kansas
for red glitter,
but tapping
on yellow brick
wasn’t the trip
a witch promised.

So it’s goodbye
to clay that burned
my toes with insistence
I travel further than
I could leave behind.


©Susie Clevenger 2014



Real Toads ~ Bits Of Inspiration ~ The Yellow Brick Road

Comments

Sherry Blue Sky said…
This is a wonderful poem, Susie, that says a great deal in so few lines.
July 16, 2014 at 7:39 PM
Fireblossom said…
As usual, you so nail the ending!
July 16, 2014 at 8:28 PM
Hannah said…
I love the colors that you bring to this poem and the closing...the meaning to be unveiled within it. Thank you for the challenge, Susie...mine ended up being less poetic but it was still fun to visit this story and spin a few words together about it. :)
July 16, 2014 at 9:22 PM
Jim said…
Nice reading, Susie ~~ I get tripped up because you can NEVER travel further than you leave behind. Math wise, one iota traveled leaves one iota behind?
So? I know there is a meaning here but it doesn't come to me. But it still sounds pretty and alluring.
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July 17, 2014 at 12:28 AM
Grandmother Mary said…
I travel further than I can leave behind- what a great line!
July 17, 2014 at 2:15 AM
Grandmother Mary said…
I travel further than I can leave behind- what a great line! Thanks for a fun challenge.
July 17, 2014 at 2:17 AM
Kerry O'Connor said…
I hear the tap of heels on yellow brick as I read this piece - excellent use of sound qualities throughout, Susie.
July 17, 2014 at 3:10 AM
Unknown said…
Wonderlust... Its a wonderful thing although forgetting what is left behind is not always best...
July 17, 2014 at 3:30 AM
hedgewitch said…
"I travel further than I can leave behind...'--that is just a priceless line, Susie--this is really one of you best. thanks for a great challenge.
July 17, 2014 at 7:53 AM
Susan said…
I can see that goodbye was called for twice. Love your final line!
July 17, 2014 at 11:07 PM
Susan said…
I can see that goodbye was called for twice. Love your final line!
July 17, 2014 at 11:07 PM
Helen said…
This is a great poem ... red glitter, leaving Kansas behind ~ I would second guess that too. (can you tell I was raised in the Midwest?)

PS! I do hope you will accept the challenge I emailed .... let me know, please.
July 18, 2014 at 2:28 PM
Anonymous said…
that's a grown-up road, there.

sorry I couldn't write to your prompt (been dry of late), and since you wanted new pens I didn't post an older piece that fits the theme (written for 2013 NaPoWriMo).

http://grapeling.wordpress.com/2013/04/10/haiku-oz-10/

~ M
July 23, 2014 at 1:07 PM
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