Ground Into Forgotten




















Fallen leaves rattle their grief
under booted feet grinding
them into forgotten.
Glory comes on warm sunbursts
only to surrender to the icy teeth of frost.

©Susie Clevenger 2014

Real Toads ~ When I Write Tanka (Part 2) ~ Hisashi Nakamura












Comments

Anonymous said…
some nice contrasts, and the first line is so vivid ~
January 20, 2014 at 12:12 AM
Other Mary said…
Very well crafted Tanka Susie.
January 20, 2014 at 7:08 AM
Maude Lynn said…
This is really gorgeous, Susie.
January 20, 2014 at 8:58 AM
Kerry O'Connor said…
There is something very thrilling about those days caught between two seasons. Such an excellent subject for tanka.
January 20, 2014 at 11:55 AM
hedgewitch said…
Very vivid images just make the seasonal mood more intense. And yay for those Outlander books on the sidebar--one of my very favorite series in fiction.
January 20, 2014 at 12:14 PM
Sherry Blue Sky said…
Love the idea of leaves "rattling their grief". Good one, Susie!
January 20, 2014 at 12:19 PM
Helen said…
You connected lines 1, 2 with 4, 5 perfectly ... lovely tanka, Susie!
January 20, 2014 at 12:25 PM
brudberg said…
You create a wonderful image with those leaves being crushed.
January 20, 2014 at 2:34 PM
steph said…
...rattle their grief.. I like that a lot. Caught between one side and the other is a great theme..
January 20, 2014 at 8:14 PM
Hannah said…
This is very dimensional...even audible...well done!
January 20, 2014 at 10:00 PM
Scarlet said…
I love the sounds, rattle & grinding ~ Beautiful tanka Susie ~
January 21, 2014 at 8:03 AM
Unknown said…
You create a vivid and enticing view of seasons ebbing and flowing.
January 21, 2014 at 12:43 PM
Forest Dream Weaver said…
Lovely photo.....don't fancy being in the grip of these icy teeth!

Ruby
January 22, 2014 at 12:21 PM
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