Dead Leaf Song

Dry words on brittle paper
sing their dead leaf song
from a worn shoe box.
Lost innocence sleeps
in a dusty womb.

©Susie Clevenger 2013

Written for Kerry's When I Write Tanka (Part 1) ~ Hisashi Nakamura at Real Toads.

Comments

Sumana Roy said…
this is sweet.....a beutiful tanka
December 22, 2013 at 3:33 AM
Kerry O'Connor said…
I really like the comparison between the old letters and a dead leaf. I wonder why we keep old letters, hanging onto the past never brings it back, as your metaphor so aptly shows.

The tanka form is tight, with upper and lower parts playing off one another.
December 22, 2013 at 5:08 AM
Grace said…
Dead leaf song- what an imagery of lost innocence ~ A lovely tanka Susie ~ Merry Christmas to you and your family ~
December 22, 2013 at 6:56 AM
Marian said…
this is so suggestive, Susie... my mind is racing with ideas about what might be written on those long-ago stored pages. very nice!
December 22, 2013 at 10:23 AM
Maude Lynn said…
Gorgeous imagery, Susie.
December 22, 2013 at 10:49 AM
Anonymous said…
Dead leaf and lost innocence- perfect pairing. Well crafted.
-HA
December 22, 2013 at 11:05 AM
cheryl said…
O to kick up leaves again, loosing innocence is such a shame. You captured it well Susie
December 22, 2013 at 1:23 PM
Sherry Blue Sky said…
Your two opening lines are glorious.......fantastic write, Susie.
December 22, 2013 at 10:22 PM
ND Mitchell said…
What a lovely expression of past innocence. I loved the opening line...
December 23, 2013 at 4:55 AM
Leovi said…
Good poem, the intricacies of existence!
December 23, 2013 at 5:11 AM
Ella said…
Beautifully done! Susie you are so talented with this form~
December 23, 2013 at 9:29 AM
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