Nylon Admiral

It wasn’t character,
bravery or service
that earned the stars
upon his shirt.

It was fingers dipped in lives
mixed with the paste of lies
that created the mud
he floated upon to promotion.

Dubbed the Nylon Admiral
for his skill at discovering
digital stowaways in lace and affairs,
he commanded his fleet smugly
across his perilous sea of blackmail.
  

©Susie Clevenger 2013

Real Toads Out of Standard ~ Future Sailors

Comments

Kerry O'Connor said…
This is a lot of fun, yet there is something very real in your character sketch, which verges on satire.
September 25, 2013 at 2:24 AM
Hannah said…
Befitting of the material...a plastic tragic tale...great job, Susie...I love this section, "It was fingers dipped in lives mixed with the paste of lies"
September 25, 2013 at 7:04 AM
Debi Swim said…
What an interesting turn your mind took on this prompt! Great write and I'd not thought of it but I believe Kerry is right.
September 25, 2013 at 10:19 AM
Margaret said…
...the paste of lies! yes, this sounds all too real.
September 25, 2013 at 10:53 AM
Sumana Roy said…

a great take on the prompt........a world not unknown.....a wonderful sketch of reality....
September 25, 2013 at 11:47 AM
Maude Lynn said…
Well done! I love your take.
September 25, 2013 at 11:58 AM
Sherry Blue Sky said…
Very clever, Susie. An admiral on a sea of blackmail. Must be a politician! hee hee.
September 25, 2013 at 12:57 PM
Unknown said…
This is really good!
September 25, 2013 at 1:16 PM
Marian said…
ouch! get away from this guy.
September 25, 2013 at 3:13 PM
Grandmother Mary said…
Hmmm, not a nice guy! But well sketched.
September 25, 2013 at 4:57 PM
Kay L. Davies said…
"fingers dipped in lives" sounds dreadful, Susie. Well said. Blackmail is a very scary thing, and your description of it is ominous.
A surprising write, but super.
K
September 25, 2013 at 5:16 PM
Anonymous said…
I thought this was, frankly, terrific; there's enough whimsy to satisfy the spirit of the prompt, but there's a lot of meat on the bones as well.
September 25, 2013 at 7:07 PM
Isadora Gruye said…
Huzzah to a meaty telling of the Nylon Admiral....I agree with Kortas, there is enough substance here and whimsy. Well done and viva la
September 25, 2013 at 7:51 PM
hyperCRYPTICal said…
Oh well done Susie - reality indeed.
Anna :o]
September 26, 2013 at 8:43 AM
Ella said…
Oh,damn I think I know him ;D

I love how you blended the essence of old world with new!
Clever and fun~
September 26, 2013 at 8:49 AM
Anonymous said…
Oh, I love that you've delved into the dark side of this prompt. As a sidenote, I am anxiously waiting for your book to arrive!
September 26, 2013 at 1:11 PM
TALON said…
How cleverly you enveloped a character's traits in these lines. I loved it. The intrigue was rampant. :)
September 27, 2013 at 12:10 AM
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