Autumn Tanka

diamond raindrops 
adorn autumn leaves
their curled palms
petitioning God
to cushion their fall

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drunk on moonlight
autumn leaves tumble
across shadows pleading
with the ghosts of summer
to share a last dance

©Susie Clevenger

At Real Toads Kerry has prompted us to write tanka poems.
My thoughts on Tanka (Part 1) ~ Hisashi Nakamura

Comments

Billy Blue Eyes said…
I really like reading your poems, they are so calming
September 22, 2013 at 2:28 AM
NataĊĦek said…
they are both lovely.. love that autumn feeling in them.
September 22, 2013 at 2:32 AM
Kerry O'Connor said…
Both your tanka have evoked the spirit of the season. I like the way the poems appear to be welcoming the advent of Autumn.
September 22, 2013 at 2:43 AM
Kathryn Dyche said…
Oh I love that second one a lot. Drunk on moonlight. . . oh yes.
September 22, 2013 at 5:41 AM
brudberg said…
The leaves dancing with the moon is enchanting... love it.
September 22, 2013 at 6:29 AM
Scarlet said…
Beautiful autumn tanka poems Susie ~ I like the curled palms & last dance of summer ~ Happy Sunday ~
September 22, 2013 at 7:59 AM
Marian said…
love the idea of the leaves petitioning God. very clever!
September 22, 2013 at 8:43 AM
LaTonya Baldwin said…
mood and images drawn are lovely.
September 22, 2013 at 1:24 PM
Rambling Woods said…
You really write so beautifully and I love to collect books of poems..Michelle
September 22, 2013 at 3:35 PM
Ella said…
Beautifully vivid! I too love that autumn magic and your words brought it! I love the ghost :D
September 22, 2013 at 8:10 PM
Margaret said…
...and the leaves are all golden, ready for that last dance... Ghosts, leaves... great autumnal imagery
September 23, 2013 at 7:35 AM
Anonymous said…
vivid personification, Susie
September 23, 2013 at 10:59 AM
Hannah said…
Two tales of season shifting...beautifully rendered, Susie!
September 24, 2013 at 6:24 PM
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