Well Traveled Patchwork

I Follow the Wind by Judith Clay
Painting ~ "I Follow the Wind" by Judith Clay

I
pedal
through fairytales
watching the cards
fall not knowing if
a house will seek my
head to fall upon or fortune
will turn its weary pinwheel into luck.
The well-traveled road of patch work dreams
rattles through my misplaced thoughts breaking childhood into reality.




©Susie Clevenger 2013

Hedgewitch at Real Toads had us writing Fibonnaci poems. Mine isn't true to the definition. I did a word count and ended up with ten lines. At dverse Poets Pub Claudia offered the artistic works of Judith Clay as inspiration to write.

Real Toads Weekend Mini-Challenge: The Fibonnaci

dVerse Poets Pub ~ Poetics ~ Judith Clay

Comments

Anonymous said…
fine piece, Susie! love how you do the Fibonacci here :)
August 25, 2013 at 12:27 PM
Brian Miller said…
the well traveled road of patchwork dreams....we dont all know our fates, only that the cards will fall...and hopefully not the house on our heads....pedalling hard does no use though, it catches up to all of us...smiles.
August 25, 2013 at 12:38 PM
Kerry O'Connor said…
I love your road of patchwork dreams.. so magical.
August 25, 2013 at 1:14 PM
hedgewitch said…
Susie, I think this is a vivid blended example of form and free verse merged--you've elements of each in it--some syllable counting, some word counting, and some free work with lines and combinations, and they make a very effective whole. The challenge in my mind is so much more about being led to write a poem than being led by the nose by a form, so thanks so much for feeling free to experiment and be creative. I love the line about fortune's weary pinwheel, as well as the one Brian quoted.
August 25, 2013 at 1:28 PM
Grace said…
Not all fairy tales end up happily ever after but hopefully some will wheel us into luck ~

Lovely work on the form ~
August 25, 2013 at 1:35 PM
Claudia said…
this reminded me of the fortune wheel in the basel münster entrance... sometimes good luck, sometimes these card houses fall on us...i think it's always worth taking the risk... cool work on both, the form and painting interpretion
August 25, 2013 at 1:45 PM
Helen said…
Lovely ... your poem and the artwork are a perfect combo!!
August 25, 2013 at 2:29 PM
brudberg said…
I love the last line... how childhood come into reality... sounds like a happy ever after.
August 25, 2013 at 2:38 PM
Mary said…
I love 'the well-traveled world of patchwork dreams.' Well written fib, Susie!
August 25, 2013 at 4:11 PM
Beachanny said…
I chose the same picture - loved your fib..don't care about the strictness - like the bicycle in the picture, it carried you where you needed to go. Well done.
August 25, 2013 at 5:09 PM
Kay L. Davies said…
Well, the vote is pretty much unanimous, Susie, your "well-traveled road of patch work dreams" is super! And I agree with Hedge, you have written the poem you were inspired to write, not one dictated by form. That is usually what it means to be a poet.
K
August 25, 2013 at 5:30 PM
humbird said…
Sounds like fun to travel through childhood fairy tales...nice on picture too...love it :)
August 25, 2013 at 5:37 PM
Truedessa said…
really like the road of patchwork dreams..and hopefully, those pinwheels will bring luck..keep your eye on the sky so you can duck if a house of cards comes falling down.
August 25, 2013 at 5:47 PM
Maude Lynn said…
I really like this, Susie!
August 25, 2013 at 8:38 PM
Sharp Little Pencil said…
Loved the road, and I would imagine it slightly bumpy on that particular bicycle, as befits life. The cards seemed like omens, or perhaps dreams yet to be realized. I was focused on the Judith Clay side along with the Whirl. Great job, Susie! Peace, Amy
August 25, 2013 at 10:35 PM
Anonymous said…
I like how you have used the Fibonacci. Great closing lines!
August 26, 2013 at 5:05 AM
Marian said…
yes, Susie, such a dreamy interpretation. love this.
August 26, 2013 at 8:09 AM
Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said…
I really loved this!! The form semed to flow well and the freedom here seemed playful
August 26, 2013 at 11:07 AM
Sherry Blue Sky said…
I love "turn that weary pinwheel into luck" - I need some of that too, kiddo. Let us hope. I love the voice in this poem, it has a note of wearyness I so resonate with. Love the "patchwork dreams" especially. Best kind.
August 26, 2013 at 12:26 PM
Anonymous said…
Well-traveled road of patchwork dreams is so lovely - I mean, difficult, but a great way of phrasing it all. Thanks much. k.
August 26, 2013 at 12:58 PM
Linda H. said…
the well traveled road of patchwork dreams...that line is a winner! I enjoyed reading this.

I chose Henry & Adele for mine.
August 26, 2013 at 7:20 PM
Preeti S. said…
An instant favourite. "A well travelled road of patchwork dreams..." I can relate to that idea. Beautifully penned. Loved it.
August 27, 2013 at 3:30 AM
ed pilolla said…
i pedal through fairytales is so directly fantastical. i love that opening to the patchwork dreams and fortune and house of cards. so strong and compact.
August 27, 2013 at 9:35 AM
Mystic_Mom said…
Love it! Very nicely done.
August 27, 2013 at 1:29 PM
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