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Monday, June 10, 2013


It grows shy in the sun
but ebony draws its petals
to open when light is done.

La luna’s namesake strikes a pose
in its dress of snowy gauze
that rivals the blush of Eliot’s rose.

Stars shine as muted floodlights,
twinkling the sky with applause,
while the moonflower dances with night.

©Susie Clevenger 2013

At Real Toads Grace challenged us to write a Nocturna.
(The Nocturna is basically a nine line poetry form based on the nocturne theme containing three, three line lessons recited during the night. The subject must be nocturnal and it consists of three couplets linked by the rhyme of the centre line.   This is usually written in decasyllabic  or iambic pentameter (10 syllables per line).   a. b. a. c. b. c. d. b. d. ) Unfortunately I didn't manage ten syllables per line. :(
I made reference to George Eliot's poem, Roses.


Sam Edge said...

Cool - "moonflower" that's a new one for me love it!

VaNdAnA ShArMa said...

Soothing and calm like moonlight:)

Marian said...

awww, beautiful. LOVE moonflowers, love them! you've captured their delicate essence, Susie.

aprille said...

'ebony' from noun [=wood] to adjective [=colour] and then back again as a noun [=dark/black] to fulfill its task in your line. Nice journey.

Grace said...

This is a beautiful nocturna Susie ~ Love the second verse specially, striking a pose with the dress of snowy gauze ~

And don't worry about the syllabic count, for I didn't follow it either ~ What's important is the rhyming pattern which you got correctly ~

Thanks for linking up to the Sunday Challenge ~ You might want to put the link in OLN Monday ~

Happy week ~

Kerry O'Connor said...

This is really beautiful, and I especially like the line which draws comparison with Eliot's rose.

Akila G said...

very beautiful! and the moonlight dances in the moonlight!

Amrit Sinha said...

Dance of the moonflower ... loved it !!!!

Jessica Arsenault said...

Such a pretty motion. I almost envision one of those time lapsed nature videos.

grapeling said...

Very sweet. Enjoyed this - thanks, Susie ~ M

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