NaPoWriMo 2013 Day Four ~ Swimming In Holy Water


Yeah, I’m living life
in a beer can baptizing
my self-worth in foam.

Give me another one
and I will put this
dead tin to rest on the bar.

Sorry, was that a choir?
I've never heard hymns
sung in short skirts and heels.

I got soul, but I’m no soldier…
Sunday school’s got its roots inside me,
but God didn’t draft me for his army.

Pull up a chair and we’ll share communion.
I can’t burn if I’m swimming in holy water.
Sure you can preach, just make it a new sermon.


©Susie Clevenger 2013

Izy at Real Toads made the challenge easy, watch the video and  write a poem inspired by it. Yep, that is where my muse took me.  Out of Standard ~ Film School Drop Out Edition

Comments

Kerry O'Connor said…
You have captured that devil-may-care attitude which might be prevalent the day before an apocalypse.. too late for tears, pass me a beer! Girls? Sure!
April 4, 2013 at 6:46 AM
Fireblossom said…
You are our Real Toads speedy keen lately, Susie! Number one with a bullet. You've done a nice job, too, on what I find to be a very difficult challenge.
April 4, 2013 at 7:16 AM
Ellecee said…
Love this Susie,especially your last lines " Sure you can preach, just make it a new sermon." I think we need some new sermons. Well done.
April 4, 2013 at 8:15 AM
Lolamouse said…
Very cool. Matches the clip but stands well on its own. I love the voice in this, and the last line is just great!
April 4, 2013 at 8:44 AM
Susan said…
WOW! I feel as if this comments on my poem, though yours was first. Great minds! Good choice of Voice.
April 4, 2013 at 8:53 AM
Marian said…
hooooo! love this. preach, baby, preach!
April 4, 2013 at 10:05 AM
Janine Bollée said…
All I can say is: Pro at work. Inventively crafted with a hard core meaning for all of us.
April 4, 2013 at 10:57 AM
Helen said…
Awesome!

Baptism by beer ~~ better than baptism by fire!!
April 4, 2013 at 11:22 AM
Ella said…
Wow Susie you nailed this one~
I love: "just make it a new sermon"
;D
April 4, 2013 at 1:23 PM
hedgewitch said…
I love this Susie--it really seems to have the same flavor as that clip, which made me feel like drowning might not be a bad thing. (I was thinkin he got sold, but he's not a soldier. Miracle Ear for Christmas, please ;_))
April 4, 2013 at 2:48 PM
Other Mary said…
I just love those last two lines:

I can’t burn if I’m swimming in holy water.
Sure you can preach, just make it a new sermon.
April 4, 2013 at 5:51 PM
Kay L. Davies said…
Fabulous, Susie! I love your beer can reference.
K
April 4, 2013 at 6:04 PM
Truedessa said…
Wow, really like this one! So much said within the words.
April 4, 2013 at 6:40 PM
Isadora Gruye said…
great job as usual here, susie! I love how you focused on the beer and the high heeled choir, yet you made the character and message one of your very own. Viva la
April 4, 2013 at 9:48 PM
Sharp Little Pencil said…
Susie, it's true, you are often #1 on the Toads Hit Parade. How you can turn out something of such great quality so fast amazes me. I'm thinking you must LIVE in the Garden and work on a tiny laptop, as I am sure the Garden has WiFi.

Talk about deconstructing the narcissism of the Justin character. Your comments on communion, etc., amazing. Loved this. Amy
April 4, 2013 at 10:29 PM
Margaret said…
Sunday school’s got its roots inside me,
but God didn’t draft me for his army.

Ah, nice line. This was really difficult and you delivered. My pome is pretty short, but it was an agonizing 45 minutes!
April 6, 2013 at 8:32 PM
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