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Friday, April 19, 2013

NaPoWriMo 2013 Day 18 ~ We Judge a Broom by its Flier

We judge a broom by its flyer
thinking wicked has no heart.

Red shoes with bright glitter
spoke of going home for one
and holding on to a memory for another.

Four hands one prize made
two spirits fight for what
they already possessed.

A young girl always had home within her
and a witch didn’t need magic shoes
to help her remember.

Compromise was never mentioned.
It was a tug of war between
I will get my wish and you won’t.

Clicking heels found Kansas
while a bucket of water
left melting green slush.

©Susie Clevenger 2013

Izy at Real Toads challenged us to use the word melting,but it was with a catch. The poem must not contain elements of fire or ice: no heat, no cold. I chose to use my poetic license and twist the movie version of The Wizard of Oz into my own interpretation. Oh, and Izy didn't say the whole poem had to be about melting. :)


Kerry O'Connor said...

I love your title, Susie and the way you cam eat this story from a completely different angle. Such a fun piece.

Robyn Greenhouse said...

Yes, we did both think Wizard of Oz! I guess it would have made for a much shorter movie if they had compromised!

Teresa said...

You did an amazing job with this challenge!

Fireblossom said...

Didn't I just say, in my review, that I love your titles? This is certainly no exception!

Shoes are no light matter, but compromise would have been much better than mellllllltinnnnnggggg!

Helen said...

How creative of you .. how clever!!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

A great response to the challenge, Susie. I, too, love your title!!!!!

Kay L. Davies said...

So well done, Susie. And you're right, it didn't have to be the whole poem!

Loredana Donovan said...

Yes, we already have within our hearts what we're looking for ... great imagery and emotion :)

Peggy said...

How sad their could be no compromise or realization that neither needed the shoes after all. Makes me think there are probably situations like this all the time--where effective communication and willingness to be flexible might let everyone have what they want.

Sharp Little Pencil said...

Susie, you are the second person to write effectively about the Wizard of Oz, only you spoke of the needless struggle between the Witch and Dorothy. This looked beyond the simple story and told a metaphorical truth: Some of our biggest battles are fought without need. I wish the Pentagon could figure this out!

Also, your title, most apt.

Wonderful. Peace, Amy

sreeja harikrishnan said...

A young girl always had home within her and a witch didn’t need magic shoes to help her remember. somehow I loved this line....
very creative..... amazing Susie...

Mary said...

I enjoyed this twist on the familiar story; and compromise WOULD definitely have been a great solution.

Marian said...

i love this, Susie... am so glad you wrote about THAT particular iconic melting and gave it your own melt, er, twist. very nice!

Isadora Gruye said...

I love the direction you took with the prompt, Susie, here the melting is a resolution and a metaphor. I do love the title too! Viva la

Lisa Williams said...

Love this!

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