Haiku in the Shade of Blue

the piano played
every blue note it had
still I asked for more

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blue eyes stare at me
there is no recognition
i had been erased

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way beyond the blue
that paints the summer morning
pisces swims in stars

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©Susie Clevenger 2012
Haiku prompt: Blue
Haiku Heights

Comments

Magical Mystical Teacher said…
Sometimes I hunger for those blue notes too! How thrilling to meet a kindred soul (maybe you, maybe just "the speaker") in the first poem.

Shadowy Blue Haiku
March 20, 2012 at 8:15 PM
Ella said…
Wow, I love this
and the ending just
makes me mind swim!
My daughter is a Pisces~

I tagged you! YOU can play or not!
I'm fine either way~
March 21, 2012 at 10:19 AM
Geraldine said…
The first two hit home, more than I can say...

Beautiful words Susie.

www.mypoeticpath.wordpress.com
March 21, 2012 at 11:13 AM
Brian Miller said…
the first two def speak blue to me...to been seen but feel erased...taht middle one is def hard...
March 21, 2012 at 4:54 PM
Jannie Funster said…
I had been erased. maybe to then be come a new work of art in another's eyes.

You write goooood!

Loved EACH of these!
March 21, 2012 at 6:48 PM
Anonymous said…
Great set of haiku, though the first two are my favorites. As I read the second one, the one word that came to mind was, "Ouch!"
March 21, 2012 at 7:52 PM
Ed Pilolla said…
after painting this so pretty, pisces swims in stars is so nice.
March 21, 2012 at 10:33 PM
Intelliblog said…
Lovely! But I am prejudiced, for blue is my favourite colour... :-)
March 22, 2012 at 3:08 AM
anthonynorth said…
Very deep blue here. Excellent.
March 23, 2012 at 3:38 AM
Grace said…
Very good set...specially the first two. You are writing very good haiku ~
March 23, 2012 at 5:16 PM
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