"I am hearing poetry when awake, dreaming poetry when asleep, breathing poetry with each breath, I am living in a poem."

Wednesday, January 25, 2012

The Fingerprint of Your Voice

I was nothing but white paper
until you took your pen
across my face.

How loudly I speak now
with the fingerprint of your voice.

My ink lips protest your dismay
at not finding the right shoes.

When I first saw your shadow
upon me I believed
there would be something
profound recorded on
my virgin surface,
a sonnet, a cinquain, an epistle.

Now I wish to curl up
 in a wrinkled ball.
My dream
of fame
to selfish
 of a fashion

©Susie Clevenger 2012

Real Toads Challenge: Write a futuristic poem
Not sure I met the challenge but I had fun.  :)


Ed Pilolla said...

haha:) a little of a surprise ending. i liked it.

Ben Ditty said...

I had fun time traveling with you ;-)

Brian Miller said...

the desire to curl up in the end says much...though i imagine you still might find fame in your verse...smiles.

Susie Clevenger said...

Thank you Ed

Susie Clevenger said...

Thanks Ben..never know where I will go mentally, space, time... :)

Susie Clevenger said...

Thank you Brian...I was feeling "Snarky" to use Lolamouse's expression

Mary said...

I too liked the ending; but I also have to say you can't force those sonnets or cinquains. Some people just don't inspire them! (Smile)

Janet said...

LOVE it!...and the interview. Thank-you:) You are quite a girl!!!

Laurie Kolp said...

Perfectly futuristic... I love it, Susie... especially the first two verses.

Teresa said...

I love the playfulness mixed with the serious treatment given the topic.

Fireblossom said...

Ha! Oh I hate it when the page talks back like that; everyone's a critic!

Kay L. Davies said...

Oh yes, we need more of these, Susie, looking at the poetry process from a different point of view. Love it!

Susie Clevenger said...

Thanks Mary..

Susie Clevenger said...

Thanks Janet

Susie Clevenger said...

Thanks Laurie..I was hoping it was at least close to the form

Susie Clevenger said...

Thanks Teresa

Susie Clevenger said...

Shay...I hate it when the page doesn't say what I want :)

Susie Clevenger said...

Thanks Kay!!

Hannah Pratt said...

It is three in the morning and I am reading poetry and this made me feel like I just had a shoe hurdled at me.
Also, I am now really glad that I didn't write the post I was going to about shoes :)

Susie Clevenger said...

Hannah...I am a shoe hypocrite...lol

Kerry O'Connor said...

This cuts deeply beneath the surface of the psyche and deserves recognition as a very fine piece of poetry.

Beyond Horizon said...

The right shoes!! definitely.

Jingle Poetry At The Gooseberry Garden said...

elegant piece...

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Margaret said...

Hopes of making a profound change dashed! ha ha love this.

Wander said...

I like how this progressed, not seeing the prompt untill the end I was enjoying what I thought was female symbology then....Good poem Susie

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