Manic Ballet



Fetters of the past
hold me with
their dark teeth
biting into the joy
of my present.

I seek escape
In avoidance.
A manic ballet
danced in toe shoes
tied with repressions ribbons.

I wish to take a grand jeté
forward into tomorrow
where I am healed.
How does one obtain freedom
from years living in quicksand?


©Susie Clevenger 2011
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Comments

Jingle Poetry At Olive Garden said…
love your wonders,
life does its own miracles.
cheers.
August 22, 2011 at 7:03 PM
Zouxzoux said…
"Manic ballet" is such a strong visual. I like this very much - good work!
September 6, 2011 at 11:38 AM
Chronicles of Illusions said…
visually poetic with each word. :)
September 7, 2011 at 4:08 PM
Cad said…
I wish to take a grand jeté
forward into tomorrow
where I am healed

There are many around who would wish the same thing... Well said.
January 30, 2012 at 4:28 AM
Marbles in My Pocket said…
Oh, yes. Wouldn't it be wonderful to be able to fast forward to the good stuff. Awesome write, Susie!

http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2012/01/29/the-sun-on-my-face/
January 30, 2012 at 6:01 AM
Mary said…
Susie, I really understand 'manic ballet.' I think there are many ways that one can heal. A close person in my life said, however, "The only way out is through."
January 30, 2012 at 6:48 AM
Kerry O'Connor said…
Gosh, this is an excellent piece - you sustained your metaphor perfectly and the pic is a marvellous accompaniment.
January 30, 2012 at 8:01 AM
Ruchi Jain said…
life is enigmatic...:)
January 30, 2012 at 8:07 AM
Marian said…
ugh, living in quicksand. such a simple phrase, and so clear.
January 30, 2012 at 8:31 AM
Tigerbrite said…
The picture is very expressive of your words. To set the spirit free from the chains of today's material life and false restrictions.
January 30, 2012 at 9:49 AM
Abin Chakraborty said…
If only there were easy answers...
the central image was very evocative
January 30, 2012 at 10:08 AM
Sherry Blue Sky said…
What a fantastic metaphor! The "dark teeth" and "manic ballet" are such accurate descriptions. I love the "grand jete forward" - I think that leap IS the actual escape from the mired past. We just leave it behind.
January 30, 2012 at 11:13 AM
Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson Barry said…
amazing grace shown here, Thanks for sharing.
January 30, 2012 at 12:06 PM
Unknown said…
Really like many of your word choices here, and the idea of mending amongst questions came through, love the ending thought regarding the quicksand. Really nice piece. Thanks
January 30, 2012 at 12:22 PM
Anonymous said…
Well danced, Susie! - I know the feeling...
January 30, 2012 at 1:45 PM
Elizena said…
I really enjoyed reading this and I have to admit that even at my great age of 50 I wish I had the power to jump forward in time where I'm completely healed. Blessings!

http://kickinitwiththekids.wordpress.com/2012/01/30/garden-of-laughs/
January 30, 2012 at 3:49 PM
Teresa said…
Very powerful and moving poem.
January 30, 2012 at 7:31 PM
Kay L. Davies said…
Beautifully done, Susie. The fetters of the past, indeed.
K
January 30, 2012 at 7:58 PM
Ella said…
I love all the strong words to display the message~
Such great imagery!!!
Well Done
January 30, 2012 at 8:19 PM
Fireblossom said…
It takes as many steps to get out as it took to get in, so they say. I love this, especially the first stanza, Susie.
January 30, 2012 at 8:20 PM
Semaphore said…
Funny, I mentally switched the places of the last two lines and the three lines before that, and the poem ends on a more hopeful note. Good read!
January 30, 2012 at 9:19 PM
Robert Gibson: PWES Editor said…
This is powerful. Wanting to do jump into healing but restricted ... man I love the images in this poem. This is really good :)
January 31, 2012 at 5:47 AM
Susie Clevenger said…
Thanks to all of you for your wonderful comments on my poem..
January 31, 2012 at 4:56 PM
Margaret said…
manic ballet... what an image and perfect! And I also like Mary's quote "The only way out is through."

I love it when poems carry a metaphor throughout a piece.
January 31, 2012 at 7:55 PM
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