Sunday, December 22, 2013

Dead Leaf Song

Dry words on brittle paper
sing their dead leaf song
from a worn shoe box.
Lost innocence sleeps
in a dusty womb.

©Susie Clevenger 2013

Written for Kerry's When I Write Tanka (Part 1) ~ Hisashi Nakamura at Real Toads.

13 comments:

Sumana Roy said...

this is sweet.....a beutiful tanka

Kerry O'Connor said...

I really like the comparison between the old letters and a dead leaf. I wonder why we keep old letters, hanging onto the past never brings it back, as your metaphor so aptly shows.

The tanka form is tight, with upper and lower parts playing off one another.

Grace said...

Dead leaf song- what an imagery of lost innocence ~ A lovely tanka Susie ~ Merry Christmas to you and your family ~

Loredana Donovan said...

Lovely imagery of lost innocence ... memories tucked away ... perhaps yearning to be set free.

Happy Holidays, Susie :)

Marian said...

this is so suggestive, Susie... my mind is racing with ideas about what might be written on those long-ago stored pages. very nice!

Mama Zen said...

Gorgeous imagery, Susie.

howanxious said...

Dead leaf and lost innocence- perfect pairing. Well crafted.
-HA

cheryl said...

O to kick up leaves again, loosing innocence is such a shame. You captured it well Susie

Wordifull Melanie said...

Lovely

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Your two opening lines are glorious.......fantastic write, Susie.

ND Mitchell said...

What a lovely expression of past innocence. I loved the opening line...

Leovi said...

Good poem, the intricacies of existence!

Ella said...

Beautifully done! Susie you are so talented with this form~