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Thursday, April 4, 2013

NaPoWriMo 2013 Day Four ~ Swimming In Holy Water


Yeah, I’m living life
in a beer can baptizing
my self-worth in foam.

Give me another one
and I will put this
dead tin to rest on the bar.

Sorry, was that a choir?
I've never heard hymns
sung in short skirts and heels.

I got soul, but I’m no soldier…
Sunday school’s got its roots inside me,
but God didn’t draft me for his army.

Pull up a chair and we’ll share communion.
I can’t burn if I’m swimming in holy water.
Sure you can preach, just make it a new sermon.


©Susie Clevenger 2013

Izy at Real Toads made the challenge easy, watch the video and  write a poem inspired by it. Yep, that is where my muse took me.  Out of Standard ~ Film School Drop Out Edition

16 comments :

Kerry O'Connor said...

You have captured that devil-may-care attitude which might be prevalent the day before an apocalypse.. too late for tears, pass me a beer! Girls? Sure!

Fireblossom said...

You are our Real Toads speedy keen lately, Susie! Number one with a bullet. You've done a nice job, too, on what I find to be a very difficult challenge.

Ellecee said...

Love this Susie,especially your last lines " Sure you can preach, just make it a new sermon." I think we need some new sermons. Well done.

Lolamouse said...

Very cool. Matches the clip but stands well on its own. I love the voice in this, and the last line is just great!

Susan said...

WOW! I feel as if this comments on my poem, though yours was first. Great minds! Good choice of Voice.

Marian said...

hooooo! love this. preach, baby, preach!

aprille said...

All I can say is: Pro at work. Inventively crafted with a hard core meaning for all of us.

Helen said...

Awesome!

Baptism by beer ~~ better than baptism by fire!!

Ella said...

Wow Susie you nailed this one~
I love: "just make it a new sermon"
;D

hedgewitch said...

I love this Susie--it really seems to have the same flavor as that clip, which made me feel like drowning might not be a bad thing. (I was thinkin he got sold, but he's not a soldier. Miracle Ear for Christmas, please ;_))

Other Mary said...

I just love those last two lines:

I can’t burn if I’m swimming in holy water.
Sure you can preach, just make it a new sermon.

Kay L. Davies said...

Fabulous, Susie! I love your beer can reference.
K

Truedessa said...

Wow, really like this one! So much said within the words.

Isadora Gruye said...

great job as usual here, susie! I love how you focused on the beer and the high heeled choir, yet you made the character and message one of your very own. Viva la

Sharp Little Pencil said...

Susie, it's true, you are often #1 on the Toads Hit Parade. How you can turn out something of such great quality so fast amazes me. I'm thinking you must LIVE in the Garden and work on a tiny laptop, as I am sure the Garden has WiFi.

Talk about deconstructing the narcissism of the Justin character. Your comments on communion, etc., amazing. Loved this. Amy

Margaret said...

Sunday school’s got its roots inside me,
but God didn’t draft me for his army.

Ah, nice line. This was really difficult and you delivered. My pome is pretty short, but it was an agonizing 45 minutes!

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