Sunday, April 21, 2013

NaPoWriMo 2013 Day 21 ~ Lune


a devil's moon
shone full and blood red
in autumn's bleeding


i will come to you
when twilight
dances with sunset


At Real Toads Grace has us writing lune. The Sunday Mini-Challenge ~ Lune



24 comments:

wovendreamsprompts said...

both of these are very beautiful.

Rita Odeh said...

i will come to you
when twilight dances
with sunset

This a beautiful short poem which can be turned into a memorable haiku:

twilight...
dancing with
sunset

aprille said...

"Twilight", that's the word I have been looking for these past 24 hours, for two of my poems.
Thank you Susie.

And these images are overwhelmingly beautiful.

Heaven said...

Your lunes are bleeding with colors and complementing the glorious pictures ~ Thank you for participating in Sunday's Challenge form ~

Grace

Susan said...

Both are complete on the minimum to the maximum rule. The second is quite seductive; I await the moment.

Mary said...

Beautiful, Susie. I love 'when twilight dances with sunset.'

Mama Zen said...

I adore that second one! Wow!

Marian said...

gosh, beautiful, Susie.

Ellecee said...

These are beautifully crafted Lunes, my favourite is the second and the pictures are really lovely. Haiga at its best,,,,

hedgewitch said...

Everything this form should be and more, in my opinion--the first is heavy and dark, yet perfectly balanced--the second just beautiful, and one more word would be too many.

Emma Major said...

love the second one

Kerry O'Connor said...

Both are gorgeous, Susie. I love the presentation with the poem written on the photograph. I should try that.

Lolamouse said...

These are lovely and a quite sensual. I love the lune written on the photos!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

So beautiful, Susie - words and images.

Kay L. Davies said...

Beautifully done, Susie. That first photo is amazing, and your poems are lovely.
K

Truedessa said...

lovely pictures and the words bring out the beauty..well done..

Ella said...

Wonderful photos to match the magic of your words~
Vivid and romantic ;D

ayala said...

Susie, beautiful!

Sharp Little Pencil said...

The photos are just the start... the "blood red moon" a perfect description, as it rises through autumn leaves. These were both set in nature, too, which is part of the Japanese haiku! Nicely done, Susie! Amy

Susie Swanson said...

These are so beautiful. You are so talented.Blessings.

Helen said...

Lovely images with superimposed words? Fantastic!!!

Loredana Donovan said...

Both images are stunning, Susie. The second haiku is my favorite, sounds romantic :)

Akila G said...

Wonderful...!

Carol Steel said...

These are lovely. More so because of the way you've linked them to gorgeous photos. The second one dances in my head. Thank you.