Sunday, February 14, 2016

Serpens


Even a snake has charms
if the flirt before the strike
has enough rose petals.

No one looks for a predator
in honey or hears the hiss
when heat is generated
from a love song.

Be careful of what crawls
in poison grass without
getting burned - Pretty words
may come bearing scars.

©Susie Clevenger 2016

16 comments:

brudberg said...

Wonderful metaphor for the threats in the lures we might meet.

Rommy said...

I feel I print this out for each one of my children. Oh gods yes, a bit of wariness can be a very good thing.

Magaly Guerrero said...

I'm with Björn, your use of metaphor does a fantastic job illustrating the dangers of the trap, showing how obvious the warnings but so easy to see when the focus is elsewhere.

Ella said...

Oh, I could almost hear a hissing tongue~ Brilliant, Susie!
Happy Valentine's Day~
I have missed your poetry

Kerry said...

Pretty words
may come bearing scars.


There's the truth of it! What a great cautionary tale.

Mama Zen said...

That first stanza is just awesome!

Debi Swim said...

Pretty words

may come bearing scars... I know that for a fact

Gillena Cox said...

caution, always, the caution factor come in as warning, never at "the head over heel stage"

much love...

Outlawyer said...

Ha! Even unpretty words! k.

rhymeswithbug.com said...

this is full of truth

Hannah said...

Concise and awesome use of metaphor, Susie!

Jim said...

A wonderful "Ides of February" (ironically the day before Valentine's Day, the 13th), poem, Susie. Especially the last lines,
"in poison grass without
getting burned - Pretty words
may come bearing scars."
'
'Et to Brute?'
..

Carol Campbell said...

Perfect metaphors! Sage advice!

Sara McNulty said...

Wise words, Susie. Great poem!

Margaret said...

I've never come across a charming snake. Well, now, the story Verdi was one of my children's favorite stories when young - about a snake. :) Great metaphor.

Anusha Das said...

Pretty words
may come bearing scars."
'wise poem