© Teresa Perin
the
oak leaf took flight
twirling
in the autumn air
to
rest upon brown grass
the
death of a season
©Susie Clevenger 2012
Image ~ stockvault
Honest Heat
Were I a virgin shell
I would gladly give
you
the pearl secreted
within me,
but I am a woman.
Passion will not
frighten me.
I need no gentle
wooing
or words you don’t
mean,
just honest heat
igniting mine.
I don’t care about
promises
or whether we meet
again.
Tonight I want to
burn
from flames we can’t
contain.
©Susie
Clevenger 2012
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16 comments:
There is quite a contrast between these two pieces, Susie, which shows your versatility as a writer. You have set a wistful tone in your Autumn piece, and then wowed us with your passionate feminine voice in the longer poem. I love that she is unapologetic and knows what she wants.
Lovely two pieces ~
I like the clear image of autumn in the first one, and the whew heat and passion in the second verse ~
I enjoyed both poems, Susie. The first expresses the sadness of the end of autumn.
And the second is rich with, shall we say, the heat of the moment!
So impressed you managed to stay to the five words per line.
Also the stanza being a proper syntax sentence. Well written and good to read.
what a concept, "honest heat." that is exactly right. very, very nice pieces.
Great contrast between these two, and it makes both of them stronger pairing them, I think. There is a lot of truth-telling in the second that really resonates for me, and you use the form well throughout--the word count being limited seems to make the images more vivid. Great work, Susie.
Strong pieces, Susie, from a strong woman. Awesome offerings this Sunday morning - a rich feast! I love the leaf photo, by the way.
Very nice. Awake for a dream.
Such a contrast between the two--your second piece is on fire--just fabulous!
Well done, Susie, well said. I love the sad beauty of the first poem and the outright honesty of the second.
K
Such different poems, but I love them both!
The oak leaf is such a great symbol. The last line says it all.
A bit of a somber tone...image captured will in your brevity and your second...yes, love the heat in this one...you created a strong feminine character in this one...great work on these!!!
I also loved the contrast in your poems ... the second is spellbinding!
Absolutely intoxicating, especially the second piece.
Wow! Each poem's words are as strong as the photo images.
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