the piano played
every blue note it had
still I asked for more
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blue eyes stare at me
there is no recognition
i had been erased
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way beyond the blue
that paints the summer morning
pisces swims in stars
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©Susie Clevenger 2012
Haiku prompt: Blue
11 comments:
Sometimes I hunger for those blue notes too! How thrilling to meet a kindred soul (maybe you, maybe just "the speaker") in the first poem.
Shadowy Blue Haiku
Gorgeous set!
Wow, I love this
and the ending just
makes me mind swim!
My daughter is a Pisces~
I tagged you! YOU can play or not!
I'm fine either way~
The first two hit home, more than I can say...
Beautiful words Susie.
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the first two def speak blue to me...to been seen but feel erased...taht middle one is def hard...
I had been erased. maybe to then be come a new work of art in another's eyes.
You write goooood!
Loved EACH of these!
Great set of haiku, though the first two are my favorites. As I read the second one, the one word that came to mind was, "Ouch!"
after painting this so pretty, pisces swims in stars is so nice.
Lovely! But I am prejudiced, for blue is my favourite colour... :-)
Very deep blue here. Excellent.
Very good set...specially the first two. You are writing very good haiku ~
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