Saturday, October 3, 2015

Telarum

I damn the prison song of fate,
a hateful melody spinning
me into a clock whose face
sees a tomorrow I can’t edit.

It is…It isn’t…
It will…It won’t…
It can…It can’t…

I dance in toe shoes
that can’t feel my heartbeat
or know the danger of tears.

Destiny is the handmaiden of hell.

©Susie Clevenger 2015



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17 comments:

Isadora Gruye said...

Yes! I love how yo've mimicked the Ofortuna here but zip it up nicely with that ending line which is all your own. Nice work!

Kerry O'Connor said...

Wonderful, Susie. We are all caught up in the web of fate and time.

brudberg said...

The handmaiden of hell, yes that darn dark lady.. I feel like I'm dancing with a lead-footed lady to your song.. brilliant end.

Susie Swanson said...

Awesome poem Susie. I'm always amazed by your creativity. As the old saying goes, "you can pull words out of a hat" Great job!!

Mama Zen said...

What a killer closing line!

Hannah said...

Kick-butt closing line!!

Rommy said...

Forced to dance the steps Destiny plays out...haunting

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

You certainly captured the dark mood of that song – elegantly and eloquently..

Susan said...

O Fortuna! for our times.

Outlawyer said...

There is a sense of puppetry and clockwork when one speaks of fate-- you've caught that so well. K.

hedgewitch said...

This really shows a responsiveness to the music, very spontaneous and full of a direct honesty. I don't think editing could possibly improve it. You seem to create a clock with your words, ticking mercilessly--one that no slam against the ground, no blow, can stop.

Fireblossom said...

This is the fate of dancers, to move to music they didn't compose.

R.K. Garon said...

Geesh... well done.
ZQ

grapeling said...

what a killer closing line, Susie ~

Jim said...

You write of a cruel Destiny. She has a very kind sister. Might that sister be coming?
Her child rides the media waves and spell binds the concert goers. Has to be a good and kind mother.

Marian said...

Yikes, Susie!

Margaret said...

Destiny - I say let's trip her up as best we can :)