"I am hearing poetry when awake,
dreaming poetry when asleep,
breathing poetry with each breath,
I am living in a poem."
That is so very true Susie. You have made the page heavy with few words as only a true poet could do! :-)
Clear, vivid picture of two unyielding people. Sad there can't be compromise but sometimes the situation is impossible. Very nice
wow - that's bleaka sad end to somethingnamastejzb
so true-it so happens..
This has such interesting context--seeds from intent--almost as if you are speaking in different spheres as the words are really very much from different worlds--seeds physical--intent mental--of course, one understands how they fit. Very interesting and works well to express the conflict and separation, Susie. Thanks. k. (http://manicddaily.wordpress.com)
There are those discussions -- eye to eye where only distances will grow.. This says it all, we have been there.. sometimes mending the bridges, but I recon that it will never be the same.
Separation between words and being able to follow them....how true
Yes. In a nutshell.
A sad state to find oneself in at any time of one's life. You express the point very clearly.
I just read the poem "Ember" at Cabernet Confessions, and this poem is similar, but with separate results. Your poem talks about two people who can't forgive and forget, or at least come to a compromise, where as in "Ember" it talks about keeping the coals burning, even among all the strife. I agree that there are moments when two people just can't agree, but keeping a warm heart in the end allows for some clarity I think.
This is subtle and makes one sift the meaning along with the seeds and intents that separate us, and of course, I love the use of the word division, which is also a kind of propagation, if in this case, not perhaps the one desired.
Killer closing line!
Ah, if only those hands would meet, take the seeds, plant them!
I especially love your last line, great job.
Sad, isn't it! Loved the last line. Beautifully done. :)
Detente at the dinner table! Someone must bend a bit of trouble will continue to brew, no?
... hoping it's long division.
...until somebody bends unexpectedly...
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