Saturday, April 19, 2014

color choice

he sugar coated his watch
but I could smell the vinegar
long before 10:00 p m

he’s too busy pleading a fifth
can’t be used against him
to notice the verdict came with the last straw

leaving my two cents with his baggage
makes my suitcase weigh less
i won’t need the house keys any more

black makes me look too pale
purple balloons are more festive
for a burning bridge


©susie clevenger 2014

Sam Edge over at Real Toads has provided e.e. cummings as inspiration for our writing.

avant-edge: e.e. cummings

15 comments:

Hannah said...

I love that..."I won't need the house keys anymore," strong and telling...great work Susie!

P.S. I popped in and put a Linky in for Sam...just as a heads up you can link up now. :)

Kerry O'Connor said...

Wow! Susie, this is an amazing poem. Your work has been exceptional this April month - your high standard has not flagged a bit, despite the rigours of a poem a day. This is one of my favourite pieces of yours. Love it.

ccchampagne said...

It's amazing how you can actually describe something so precise without making any sense at all. Wonderful! Great write!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

WOW! You knocked this one out of the park! Fantastic! Love the purple balloons!

Charleen said...

Nice! Love your play with words. Well done!

Sumana Roy said...

i love this one...a great relief in the closing line...

manicddaily said...

Love the pleading the fifth especially. So potent. Very well done, Susie. K.

Sam Edge said...

Wow - ee cummmings meets Alanis Morrisette! a real edge to this one :)

Kathryn said...

Love, love, love this piece and the visuals at play. Fantastic piece.

Ella said...

Wonderful! I love the bridge-the vivid purple...! Amazing~

Kay L. Davies said...

Great work, Susie. Kerry is right, and if Sam will allow a pun, you haven't lost your edge.
Luv, K

Marian said...

some bridges just beg for burning, and rightly so.

humbird said...

I see the scene...impressive ~ Just imagined each word played by actors...how'd they play a vinegar? haha ..see sour face ~ fun, Susie

Margaret said...

...you channelled e. e. cummings (and in my humble opinion) exceeded him! Love this!

grapeling said...

now that's a finishing line. purple is a great color for freedom ~