Monday, March 24, 2014

Traveling Alone

I packed all I was
into your baggage
until I decided
it was better
to travel alone.

©Susie Clevenger 2014


17 comments:

Marcoantonio Arellano said...

this was short but cleverly strait to the point

hope your monday goes well

Dick Jones said...

Short and delightfully sharp!

blueoran said...

When one travels alone they don't have to carry the other's baggage. Easier perhaps but bittersweet.

Susan said...

Amen. Which doesn't mean you can't sit together and store the baggage side by side.

humbird said...

so cute! ~ lovely week :)x

Kerry O'Connor said...

Your 17 words pack one helluva punch, lady!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I love this, fellow traveler!

Helen said...

Short stuff ~~ pretty amazing!

Jim said...

My motto is "don't stay where you aren't comfy."

Your poem reminded me of our river boat cruise trip down the Yangtze (China). Some of the dining room wait staff were very small and sort of young. I would say that I'd like to put two into my suitcase.
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Mama Zen said...

Amen, sister!

Herotomost said...

Bam...that's a dirt clod with a rock in it upside the head. That one definitely had a point...sharpened with experience.

kaykuala said...

Momentous decision yes! It can be most rewarding! Nicely Susie!

Hank

Steve King said...

Smart, succinct, and with a kind of elegance that comes from being sure of oneself and sure in oneself. Nicely done.
Steve K.

Robert Bourne said...

strong,powerful and short and a theme that echos.. loved this

Kay L. Davies said...

Right now your poem makes me laugh, because we're packing for another of my husband's adventures, this one for his 70th birthday. Almost every piece of clothing he puts into his suitcase has to be brought to me, for my opinion, and if he doesn't like my opinion...well, you can imagine...
Luv, K

Margaret said...

What a clever turn of phrase! "knock out"

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Oh so well done! Clever - love it.
Anna :o]