"I am hearing poetry when awake,
dreaming poetry when asleep,
breathing poetry with each breath,
I am living in a poem."
A lovely tone it has:)
some nice contrasts, and the first line is so vivid ~
Very well crafted Tanka Susie.
This is really gorgeous, Susie.
There is something very thrilling about those days caught between two seasons. Such an excellent subject for tanka.
Very vivid images just make the seasonal mood more intense. And yay for those Outlander books on the sidebar--one of my very favorite series in fiction.
Love the idea of leaves "rattling their grief". Good one, Susie!
You connected lines 1, 2 with 4, 5 perfectly ... lovely tanka, Susie!
You create a wonderful image with those leaves being crushed.
...rattle their grief.. I like that a lot. Caught between one side and the other is a great theme..
This is very dimensional...even audible...well done!
I love the sounds, rattle & grinding ~ Beautiful tanka Susie ~
You create a vivid and enticing view of seasons ebbing and flowing.
Lovely photo.....don't fancy being in the grip of these icy teeth!Ruby
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