Sunday, January 5, 2014

Blabbering Blibbering Mistrust

“You used to be much more..."muchier." You've lost your muchness.” 
Alice in Wonderland ~ Lewis Carroll 


When did you become the queen of boredom?
You are as unfun as the Tinsel Toed Tizzy
who whirls in black fits while she spits conundrums.

Your pigtails are always tied in a naysayers knot
with all your spouting I should and you should not.

Wiggle Rots and Ziggle Goats are much more fun.
they jiggle and giggle under the marmalade sun.

Be gone with your bloated I musts…..
all your blabbering blibbering mistrust….

I wish much less of your more.
Please go back to how you were before
your nitpicking snipping morphed you into a bore.


©Susie Clevenger 2014

Ok, Kerry over at Real Toads challenged us to write fantasy.  I am not sure were this came from. I rarely write poems that rhyme because I am not good at it. I am sure this piece will just prove that point, but my muddled brain so needs a touch of fun. :) Birthdays in January ~ Tolkien, Milne, Carroll

12 comments:

Kay L. Davies said...

And this is a wonderful touch of fun. Ever so very Lewis Carroll. I'm thrilled to see you writing rhyming nonsense, because it's one of my favorite things! No, you are not losing your mind, you're finding your sense of silly.
Luv, K

Kerry O'Connor said...

Oh, this is excellent, Susie! Not only have you employed Lewis Carroll's love of nonsense words, but you have delivered a strong message too. I don't find this silly in the least. It is sad to see someone who was once so full of life, grow to be a nit-picking bore. "Your pigtails are always tied in a naysayer's knot" - that is such a brilliant line.

Mama Zen said...

This is marvelous, Susie!

LaTonya Baldwin said...

You made me laugh and smile broadly. Glad you posted.

Fireblossom said...

*snork*

Heaven said...

How fun Susie, I was smiling till the end ~ Also, the title is creative ~

Rachelle Smith Stokes said...

Gaaaaaaah!!! I love this. Kind of Lewis Carol ish with the language! Very fun and clever. The use of real and made up language. Hoorah!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Love it, Susie, it made me smile. I wrote something similar recently called Mouse Stew and didnt post it. I am re-thinking that as yours was so much fun to read.

hedgewitch said...

I think I have shared several workplaces with this character--ugh--lots of fun here, Susie, and I like the rhyming; in this context it's perfect.

Pealogic said...

Really good Wonderland take. Really got the feel of it.

Helen said...

You have me smiling in utter delight ... I love this!

Björn said...

Somehow I get a feeling of s sadness. of a childhood lost.. really moved me despite the lighthearted wordplay...