Wednesday, September 25, 2013

Nylon Admiral

It wasn’t character,
bravery or service
that earned the stars
upon his shirt.

It was fingers dipped in lives
mixed with the paste of lies
that created the mud
he floated upon to promotion.

Dubbed the Nylon Admiral
for his skill at discovering
digital stowaways in lace and affairs,
he commanded his fleet smugly
across his perilous sea of blackmail.
  

©Susie Clevenger 2013

17 comments:

Kerry O'Connor said...

This is a lot of fun, yet there is something very real in your character sketch, which verges on satire.

Hannah said...

Befitting of the material...a plastic tragic tale...great job, Susie...I love this section, "It was fingers dipped in lives mixed with the paste of lies"

Debi Swim said...

What an interesting turn your mind took on this prompt! Great write and I'd not thought of it but I believe Kerry is right.

Margaret said...

...the paste of lies! yes, this sounds all too real.

Sumana Roy said...


a great take on the prompt........a world not unknown.....a wonderful sketch of reality....

Mama Zen said...

Well done! I love your take.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Very clever, Susie. An admiral on a sea of blackmail. Must be a politician! hee hee.

Sam Edge said...

This is really good!

Marian said...

ouch! get away from this guy.

Grandmother said...

Hmmm, not a nice guy! But well sketched.

Kay L. Davies said...

"fingers dipped in lives" sounds dreadful, Susie. Well said. Blackmail is a very scary thing, and your description of it is ominous.
A surprising write, but super.
K

wkkortas said...

I thought this was, frankly, terrific; there's enough whimsy to satisfy the spirit of the prompt, but there's a lot of meat on the bones as well.

Isadora Gruye said...

Huzzah to a meaty telling of the Nylon Admiral....I agree with Kortas, there is enough substance here and whimsy. Well done and viva la

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Oh well done Susie - reality indeed.
Anna :o]

Ella said...

Oh,damn I think I know him ;D

I love how you blended the essence of old world with new!
Clever and fun~

razzamadazzle said...

Oh, I love that you've delved into the dark side of this prompt. As a sidenote, I am anxiously waiting for your book to arrive!

TALON said...

How cleverly you enveloped a character's traits in these lines. I loved it. The intrigue was rampant. :)