Sunday, August 25, 2013

Well Traveled Patchwork

I Follow the Wind by Judith Clay
Painting ~ "I Follow the Wind" by Judith Clay

I
pedal
through fairytales
watching the cards
fall not knowing if
a house will seek my
head to fall upon or fortune
will turn its weary pinwheel into luck.
The well-traveled road of patch work dreams
rattles through my misplaced thoughts breaking childhood into reality.




©Susie Clevenger 2013

Hedgewitch at Real Toads had us writing Fibonnaci poems. Mine isn't true to the definition. I did a word count and ended up with ten lines. At dverse Poets Pub Claudia offered the artistic works of Judith Clay as inspiration to write.


25 comments:

insanebloom said...

fine piece, Susie! love how you do the Fibonacci here :)

Brian Miller said...

the well traveled road of patchwork dreams....we dont all know our fates, only that the cards will fall...and hopefully not the house on our heads....pedalling hard does no use though, it catches up to all of us...smiles.

Kerry O'Connor said...

I love your road of patchwork dreams.. so magical.

hedgewitch said...

Susie, I think this is a vivid blended example of form and free verse merged--you've elements of each in it--some syllable counting, some word counting, and some free work with lines and combinations, and they make a very effective whole. The challenge in my mind is so much more about being led to write a poem than being led by the nose by a form, so thanks so much for feeling free to experiment and be creative. I love the line about fortune's weary pinwheel, as well as the one Brian quoted.

Grace said...

Not all fairy tales end up happily ever after but hopefully some will wheel us into luck ~

Lovely work on the form ~

Claudia said...

this reminded me of the fortune wheel in the basel münster entrance... sometimes good luck, sometimes these card houses fall on us...i think it's always worth taking the risk... cool work on both, the form and painting interpretion

Helen said...

Lovely ... your poem and the artwork are a perfect combo!!

Björn said...

I love the last line... how childhood come into reality... sounds like a happy ever after.

Mary said...

I love 'the well-traveled world of patchwork dreams.' Well written fib, Susie!

Loredana Donovan said...

I love patch work dreams ... such a beautiful interpretation of the artwork :)

Beachanny said...

I chose the same picture - loved your fib..don't care about the strictness - like the bicycle in the picture, it carried you where you needed to go. Well done.

Kay L. Davies said...

Well, the vote is pretty much unanimous, Susie, your "well-traveled road of patch work dreams" is super! And I agree with Hedge, you have written the poem you were inspired to write, not one dictated by form. That is usually what it means to be a poet.
K

humbird said...

Sounds like fun to travel through childhood fairy tales...nice on picture too...love it :)

Truedessa said...

really like the road of patchwork dreams..and hopefully, those pinwheels will bring luck..keep your eye on the sky so you can duck if a house of cards comes falling down.

Mama Zen said...

I really like this, Susie!

Sharp Little Pencil said...

Loved the road, and I would imagine it slightly bumpy on that particular bicycle, as befits life. The cards seemed like omens, or perhaps dreams yet to be realized. I was focused on the Judith Clay side along with the Whirl. Great job, Susie! Peace, Amy

gabriellaswritingcorner said...

I like how you have used the Fibonacci. Great closing lines!

Marian said...

yes, Susie, such a dreamy interpretation. love this.

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

I really loved this!! The form semed to flow well and the freedom here seemed playful

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I love "turn that weary pinwheel into luck" - I need some of that too, kiddo. Let us hope. I love the voice in this poem, it has a note of wearyness I so resonate with. Love the "patchwork dreams" especially. Best kind.

Anonymous said...

Well-traveled road of patchwork dreams is so lovely - I mean, difficult, but a great way of phrasing it all. Thanks much. k.

Linda H. said...

the well traveled road of patchwork dreams...that line is a winner! I enjoyed reading this.

I chose Henry & Adele for mine.

Enigmatic Soul said...

An instant favourite. "A well travelled road of patchwork dreams..." I can relate to that idea. Beautifully penned. Loved it.

ed pilolla said...

i pedal through fairytales is so directly fantastical. i love that opening to the patchwork dreams and fortune and house of cards. so strong and compact.

Mystic_Mom said...

Love it! Very nicely done.