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Tuesday, August 6, 2013

Urban ~ Haiku Heights #268

animal noises
echo in concrete mountains
humans prowl the night

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bright lights jewel posts
urban electric starlight shines
in a neon sky


©Susie Clevenger 2013


17 comments :

Vaishali Jain said...

Perfect imagery, Susie. :)

The first one gave me an eerie feeling. Kind of. :D

LaTonya Baldwin said...

Especially like the first. Like how you turn the idea of the natural world on its head.

Reshma said...

Loved both your takes Susie, man is the scariest wild animal of all. We city-folk seek solace in neon sky and air scented with vehicular exhaust...

Siggi in Downeast Maine said...

I like both...#1 is awesome with the humans prowling.
Peace,
Siggi

Mama Zen said...

Pretty haiku, Susie.

Maggie Grace said...

I like the rawness of the first and the second is beautiful! Upside/downside of city life. Love it ♥

Ben Ditty said...

I prowl these concrete mountains in the neon sky :-)

Great work.

Kalpana Solsi said...

Humans prowl the night.
This is so apt. beautifully expressed.

Ramesh Sood said...

I could see the lights glittering..
nice haiku...

Mine is here:

http://rameshsood.blogspot.in/2013/08/shadow-of-high-rise-haiku.html

RS

Reading Pleasure said...

Both are beautifully done. The first one is such a brilliant take

Susie Swanson said...

Love the Haiku Susie. You always bring out the imagery so well. awesome as usual. hugs, xo

himani rawat nayal said...

I love how you have give two different outlooks to it...

rallentanda said...

Like the second one..magic in faux plastic1

Nanka said...

Both well done and the second one has actually something nice to say about the urban land!! :-)

Sumana Roy said...


love the contrasting dark and bright images.

Sumit Sarkar said...

wow...well thought of...
animals and humans..nwadays have no difference
:)

Claudia said...

Susie,
Wonderful haiku! The first one seems like we're in some kind of zoo or jungle full of humans. Though a little scary, I like it. And the second seems nicer, more pleasant... :)

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