Saturday, June 1, 2013

Question the Leap


Leap of love,
why does it
sound like death?

I don’t want
to give up
being me
to be funneled
into your conception.

Walk beside me.
My feet refuse
the command
to follow.
  

©Susie Clevenger 2013


The challenge was to write to the photo prompt using exactly 33 words.



20 comments:

steph said...

Walk beside me... very nice. I like the confidence in the voice. Well done.

Maggie Grace said...

Ahhh, lovely. I remember the days of being consumed before learning how to be equal...an individual. Really beautiful writing.

Ann Bennett said...

My grandmother always said, "You can talk me into anything but you can't tell me to do anything." Human nature.

Susie Clevenger said...

@steph, thank you

Susie Clevenger said...

@Maggie Grace, thanks so much

Susie Clevenger said...

@Ann, That's for sure. :)

VaNdAnA ShArMa said...

Love means freedom, the person should accept the way we are :) lovely poem...as always...:)

Draug said...

This is really great. I love how you put it.

Susie Clevenger said...

@VanDnAnA, thank you so much

Trifecta said...

Love is all about cooperation and meeting in the middle. This portrays that wisdom wonderfully.

Thank you for linking up!

Susie Clevenger said...

@Draug, Thank you!
@Trifeta, Thanks! I loved the challenge!

Indigo said...

Perfect description of love and yes, it should be questioned. Everyone believes that love makes two people into one whole. I'd rather believe it's two individuals who share a life, not one entity. (Hugs)Indigo

Susie Clevenger said...

@Indigo, thank you so much! I so agree.

De said...

Love
"funneled
into your conception,"
especially.

Suzanne said...

This is lovely Susie! I love the last stanza in particular. Well done!

Christine Hanolsy said...

I love that last stanza. "My feet refuse the command to follow." Fantastic!

trudgingthroughfog said...

I love that last stanza. "My feet refuse the command to follow." Fantastic!

Björn said...

very beautiful and well told

JannaTWrites said...

This is wonderful! I agree that we shouldn't lose ourselves in love or be forced to follow.

Susie Clevenger said...

@De, thank you
@Suzanne, thank you so much!
@Christine, Thanks
@trudingthroughfog, Thank you!
@Bjorn, thanks so much
@Janna, thank you...we should always remain who we are