"I am hearing poetry when awake,
dreaming poetry when asleep,
breathing poetry with each breath,
I am living in a poem."
© Susie Clevenger 2013
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Love this, Susie. Sorry I missed your interview last night but I was running the kids around. How'd it go?
but I can’t spare the emotionWhat a put down! Short, sharp and oh, so telling. :)
Some things we just bear cos of love...
Oh dear, SNAP for hating smoke, but this isn't you, is it?Very sharp and a little scary.What's this about an interview? Radio? Podcast? Where?
This poem makes me angry. My first impulse is to take that cup of coffee and throw it into his face!
The smell of smoke is just horrible one time. Now it is known to be also dangerous! But smokers still abound! Nicely Susie!Hank
This is just devastating in its simplicity, Susie. I am thinking now of how most murders are committed by family members. Excellent micropoetry with a macro that won't quit.
Wow, those few lines spoke volumes.
powerful acerbic, great job!
almost bring to mind a scene from mad men.succinct and sharp.
I agree with Charleen. Smack!Yes, it's a great putdown, as Jinksy said, but I hope this is just poetry, not reality, or at the very most just exaggeration for emphasis. The reality would be unbearable, not to mention utterly revolting.K
Perfectly succinct. I adore the "I cant spare the emotion"........I so hear you!
You have described a rather poisonous relationship so well by focusing not on the people themselves but the object which has caused displeasure, and the thought at the end says it all.
I'm with Kerry here. What a brilliant poem. Ouch!
The objects you chose and the picture you draw, hits hard. . You can't read this without feeling how suffocating, slow burning the cancer is here.
Sometimes smoke gets in your eyes, even when it's not a beautiful thing burning. Short, sharp, and all stiletto.
Powerful few lines. Makes me want to throw the coffee at him too!
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