Thursday, April 25, 2013

NaPoWriMo 2013 Day 25 ~ An Apple's Coffined Sleep



Jealousy didn’t like what a mirror spoke
and turned a poisoned apple in to coffined sleep.
Snow White’s tale of an evil queen,
seven dwarfs and a prince
proved love had the power
to reverse the sting of animus’s venom.


©Susie Clevenger 2013

Izy at Real Toads has us writing Cliff Notes of our favorite stories. She also set a limit of ten lines. Out of Standard ~ Cliff Notes

13 comments:

Rita Odeh said...

Snow White is my favourite fairy tale since childhood.
The challenge was really inspiring. You expressed your thoughts in a stunning way.

Blessings...
Rita

Susan said...

Haha! "animus venom"! Love is always the answer. I like this one a lot.

aprille said...

With the competently succinct [how I love this word] way you construed the first 2 lines, we could go straight from 'sleep' to 'love' and understand this.
Maybe the bright shiny image gives the game away:-)

Fireblossom said...

Beware of fruit vendors wearing pointy black hats!

Kerry O'Connor said...

Snow White is such a perennial favourite. I like the way you shifted the focus to the apple, the jealousy and brought the characters in later.

Mama Zen said...

Love "coffined sleep." That is so cool!

Margaret said...

....jealousy had it coming!

razzamadazzle said...

This is wonderful!

Kay L. Davies said...

Fantastic, Susie!
K

Emma Major said...

I love the way you've penned, it almost obliterates the fear this film fills me with

Ella said...


Bravo....
I guess I need to redo mine!
;D
Love how you expressed the doom and gloom and enchantment!

Isadora Gruye said...

I agree with Aprille, that your first two lines are brilliantly synched and set up the focus of this Cliffs Notes on the power of love. Well done!!! and Viva la

Loredana Donovan said...

Beautifully done and yes to the power of love! :)