©Margaret
Bednar
Weathered, cracked, and broken,
they stand with marble etchings
facing the sunrise.
I wandered among the gravestones
reading epitaphs, birthdates, death.
The chiseled hyphens stirred so many questions.
The stones were silent.
©Susie Clevenger 2012
Kerry Challenged us to write a Sevenling poem
Real Toads The Sunday Mini-Challenge
22 comments:
This gave me chills as I read - you extracted such a pensive mood from the stones themselves.
Yes, they always do seem to be that way, but our thoughts about them are not.
"the stones were silent"......beautiful sevenling, kiddo.
I like the contrast of questions and silent stones ~ Nice sevenling ~
'The chiselled hyphens slurred so many questions..' really a standout line, so much summed up in those bare figure--great take on the prompt, Susie.
Know what? I forgot the form, reading this. That is the ultimate accolade.
So competent and complete. A miniature with delicate observations. And yes, if the stones could talk...
yes, hyphens raise questions un-answered . . .
Those hyphens sure hide a lot of the story of someone's life, don't they? Gorgeous writing!
The line about the hyphens is just brilliant. This is really excellent.
The stones kept their secrets to themselves. Nicely Susie!
Hank
I try so hard to read the chisels ... and sometimes that is all they are as time has made them unreadable - they don't "speak" anymore.
The stones , they are a mute witness to our despair..
Very nice....and the stones are always silent, aren't they? A powerful ending.
I just love walking amid the stones...reading each meaningful name. Beautiful thoughts, Susie.
Oh, what a great ending. Yes, it's all contained in those hyphens!
hmmm, pretty. i walk there.
Cemeteries are mysterious ... resurrecting all sorts of emotions ... great fodder for poetry.
Your sevenling is amazing.
This took me to the graveyard-
The energy of the dead and the wonder of who many were...
This is hauntingly brilliant!
Wow, chiseled hyphens-love it!
I agree this had a chill to it!
In a great way!
I looove the line
chiseled hyphens, so clever!
I really enjoyed this poem :D
Lovely
Your jump to the last line is inspired.
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