So comes the dark and lonely night.
I stood holding up the sun,
but still it fell from the sky.
The star curtain falls,
a shroud of my failure
wraps me in ebony.
A bat wing breeze
brushes across my skin,
I shiver in my memories.
Love and hell are four letters
one stole my heart,
the other watched it burn.
Alone was not my destination
when I believed that
two could become one.
I stare into the bleakness
where even light will not
penetrate the dark.
Night, please go quickly
I wish to escape the demons
that haunt in wedding white.
©Susie Clevenger 2012
Written for Facebook's "Dark Night" Creations Contest
Ambrosia: Reflections in Writing And Art
Real Toads Open Link Monday 23
15 comments:
A sad night it is... I specially like love and hell as being 4 letters...nice share Susie ~
Happy Monday ~
Oh, so lovely, Susie. I especially like verse 2 and 4 and the ending!
Awww...how sad. To be left wearing wedding white, is even sadder.
Gosh this cuts deep Susie.
That is a crazy strong start to a poem....sets mood, a great visual, a tone that prepares one for the downward spiral. Love and hell.....pretty sure my wife probably spells those the same...lol. Great writing Susie.
They say that love and hate are two sides to the same coin, and when you flip it, the chances it will land one way or the other - are even. So sad that this may be more true than one realizes.
Strong write Susie. Love the Love and Hell stanza. Good read. Thanks
Susie, this is really good writing!
I like especially
"Love and hell are four letters
one stole my heart, the other watched it burn."
oh i just love "bat wings." love.
oops, i meant "bat wing breeze." thought bat wings just by themselves are pretty cool, too :)
this should be set to tunes.would make a soulful rock number.loved it.
Love and hell are four letters...great line!
I love the title, and the lines in which the title appears, such a skillful turn of phrase in the introduction of your theme. Lovely work.
Love and hell are four letters
one stole my heart,
the other watched it burn.
and
that haunt in wedding white.
I don't mean to copy and paste but those took my breath away. Sadness, loneliness captured so well in this poem.
Oh wow! This was painful to read, but wonderfully written! The stanza/line about love and hell really captured my eye.
Keep up the good work! :)
Four letter words, and so many other wonderful phrases and images! This is so good...so very very good.
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