The sea lured my heart.
I dreamed in the salt
of its lullaby.
My eyes saw
one blue horizon
splashed in white waves.
The Ancient Mariner
was spoken by the wind
billowing my sails.
Land implored me
to leave the wooden
planks beneath my feet.
My watery mistress
was jealous of the
white sand siren call.
She raged a bitter gale
to toss me from
her sea foam breast.
I am now buried
in sand I cannot
stand on.
And look out
upon a sea
I cannot sail.
©Susie Clevenger 2011
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26 comments:
A beautiful connection with the sea. :-)
This is wonderful Susie, even more so hearing you read it!
"I dreamed in the salt of its lullaby.
My eyes saw one blue horizon splashed in white waves."
Lovely writing! :-)
You've covered the pic from all angles. Excellently done.
Such a powerful lead line. Such is maintained throughout the whole poem. Well done.
Ah! Another ancient mariner, I see...
Beautiful lines Susie
Lovely... I especially like 5 and 6.
So many interesting responses to this picture, and this was is particularly evocative: you capture both the sense of yearning and indecision so very well.
Hi Susie, beautiful poem and loved your audio version. :)
A hard lesson in frustration!
aw, leave those wooden planks behind. this is lovely.
Your poem tells a romantic if sad tale, every stanza with its own thought, its own slant. I love the first stanza especially - it is the story of my heart too...
I like it. That's one powerful mistress.
This is stunning Susie!!
Ah. The age old song of jealousy! Very well done!
wow, that watery mistress is vicious! great write, susie.
the salt of its lullaby...gosh, love that...and then the sadness there in the end...
what could be sadder than looking on a sea you cannot sail?
Great Susie! More so hearing the voice-over. It's sad when we desire but physically stopped in our tracks by circumstances!
Hank
Original, creative take on this week's prompt...
Wonderfully done, Susie. A sea-song and a dirge in one. Super!
K
Fantastic interpretation of the prompt! Well done!
Loving the depth as well as the ebb and flow in this delightful piece.
Excellent piece, especially the bittersweet ending of the last two stanzas. Great Magpie, Susie!
Expertly done.
Anna :o]
That's a beautiful poem!
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