Wednesday, September 7, 2011

Hidden~Senryu


if I bite my tongue
i can keep my love hidden
please lips be silent


©Susie Clevenger 2011
Height of Haiku Challenge
September-30 Haikus in 30 days
Prompt Day 8: Hidden



13 comments:

Grace said...

Secrets..how we keep them ~

andy sewina said...

Phew, that's a tough call!

Nicely!!

ShonEjai said...

You haiku is very powerful. Great job! I love it!

Lisa said...

Hidden love - very sad.

InspiredbyLisa

beccagivens said...

Such love ... dare to be spoken!! Tough ~~ nicely done!

knot2share said...

why do we all try to hide the love??

Ron. said...

Solid senryu; greatly enjoyed. Seems we're on the same wavelength on this prompt.

Ramesh Sood said...

I like the way you said it...

Nanka said...

A slip betwixt tongue and lip?? Don't bite it hard for sooner or later it has to come out!!

mjshorts said...

A beautiful senryu.
So much captured in so few words.

Magical Mystical Teacher said...

An impossible task?



Hidden things here and here and here

iblogmoore (Amanda Moore) said...

this is so original my heart kinda dropped after I read this, it's terrific!

Leo said...

ah. but will heart support lips and tongue?