Hidden~Senryu


if I bite my tongue
i can keep my love hidden
please lips be silent


©Susie Clevenger 2011
Height of Haiku Challenge
September-30 Haikus in 30 days
Prompt Day 8: Hidden



Comments

Grace said…
Secrets..how we keep them ~
andy sewina said…
Phew, that's a tough call!

Nicely!!
ShonEjai said…
You haiku is very powerful. Great job! I love it!
Anonymous said…
Such love ... dare to be spoken!! Tough ~~ nicely done!
knot2share said…
why do we all try to hide the love??
Ron. said…
Solid senryu; greatly enjoyed. Seems we're on the same wavelength on this prompt.
Ramesh Sood said…
I like the way you said it...
Nanka said…
A slip betwixt tongue and lip?? Don't bite it hard for sooner or later it has to come out!!
Anonymous said…
A beautiful senryu.
So much captured in so few words.
An impossible task?



Hidden things here and here and here
Anonymous said…
this is so original my heart kinda dropped after I read this, it's terrific!
Vinay Leo R. said…
ah. but will heart support lips and tongue?